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Published: 2004-06-17 23:09:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 31; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 4
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dont tell me thisi dont wanna hear it
i hate seeing you cry
hate watching you
like this
dont make me run
because i have nowhere to go
you give me no choice
why did you do this?
you speak of his cruelty
his temper
so feirce it made you hurt
both inside and out
i hate him
and you
dont tell me this
my blood boils
and i finally scream
"SHUT UP"
making you wince
but you've pushed me too far
now i'm gone
throwing everything
that is in my way
as it hits the wall
crashing
breaking
now nothing but dust
all i can say
is "i hate you"
as loud as i can
unable to stop myself
finally i collapse
exhausted
from this venting
and you dare to say
"you're just like your father"
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Comments: 9
Thats not really a bad poem. It cleary expresses your anger. 
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yeah well *shrug* you have reasons to be
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just like your father eh? Sounds like a Prince song, and another song that some rock group did. But maybe I'm just like my mother, she's never satisfied. Maybe I'm just like my father, too bold.
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i'm like me dad...stubborn. lol, i always haffta have to last word...BLAH!
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thanks 
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I like the poem! Just a few weak spots that I think could be better. The "SHUT UP" doesn't really flow much, but that could have been what you were going for. And i think the ending would have been better if it was stronger....umm...something like
finally i collapse
exhausted
from this venting
and you say
"you're just like your father"
How dare you.
But I liked the poem, lots of emotions
Love
Heather
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