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Published: 2004-07-25 07:57:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 159; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 28
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Description Shadowed from these people
I sit back and watch
Observing calmly
This world slowly turns round
The dirtied man still pleads for food
The exhausted woman sprints toward her taxi
All too busy to stop
And smell the wilting roses

Turning the corner
Somehow you catch my eye
Waiting to cross the road
You run a sweaty hand
Through the thick line of hair
Trailing down the middle of your shaved skull
Please tell me I’m dreaming

The light flickers red
Slowly you walk closer to me
I realize I’m staring
Again
And quickly go back to acting “normal”
But I cant help but wonder…

Clumsy as I am
I nearly fall off my chair
When I see your eyes searching mine
Don’t blink
Don’t look away
Don’t breathe
One brief moment in time…

Gone.
Now beyond me
Your eyes torn away
Back to staring ahead
Blending with the rest

But you saw me
And now I don’t feel so invisible
Only stupid
I close my dropped jaw
And gather my things
Maybe next time I’ll speak
And begin something worth while.
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Comments: 20

forgotteninnocence [2004-08-12 15:33:27 +0000 UTC]

love it!!!!!


alex

i put a quote here cause im a dork like that

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mutexvoice [2004-07-26 19:21:46 +0000 UTC]

It's nice...for romance....I don't like romance.....so...don't really expect much from a loser like me.

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moldygrape In reply to mutexvoice [2004-07-26 19:33:28 +0000 UTC]

lol, thats cool. personally, i'm not into it much either...

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Jack-O [2004-07-25 21:10:46 +0000 UTC]

Honestly, I think this is your most well written poem i've read yet!

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moldygrape In reply to Jack-O [2004-07-25 21:11:23 +0000 UTC]

wow, thanks!!

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Jack-O In reply to moldygrape [2004-07-25 21:13:13 +0000 UTC]

NO POBLAMO!!!

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MoonlitShadow [2004-07-25 20:50:59 +0000 UTC]

one of your best yet. Wonderful work! I love the whole overall idea, not to mention i love the first stanza!

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moldygrape In reply to MoonlitShadow [2004-07-25 20:52:44 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Pendragon2879 [2004-07-25 17:37:48 +0000 UTC]

Awesome!! So you aren't invisible eh? I could have told you that, but its great to get phsyical recognition. Love this, so nice, gotta read it twice.

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moldygrape In reply to Pendragon2879 [2004-07-25 17:39:28 +0000 UTC]

no dont read it twice...horrible. *rips poem into small peices*

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Pendragon2879 In reply to moldygrape [2004-07-25 17:43:12 +0000 UTC]

why do you hate it so much?

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moldygrape In reply to Pendragon2879 [2004-07-25 17:46:33 +0000 UTC]

i'm not happy with it. sounds the same as everything else. completely frustrating.

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Pendragon2879 In reply to moldygrape [2004-07-25 17:52:55 +0000 UTC]

Thats why I hate my stuff. All sounds the same to me. Think I will stop writing for awhile. But I like this!

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moldygrape In reply to Pendragon2879 [2004-07-25 18:41:28 +0000 UTC]

WHY?! i want to read your work... agh...

thanks

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rntrnt [2004-07-25 14:49:33 +0000 UTC]

bladder.

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moldygrape In reply to rntrnt [2004-07-25 17:10:26 +0000 UTC]

what?

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rntrnt In reply to moldygrape [2004-07-25 17:11:02 +0000 UTC]

...bladder?

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moldygrape In reply to rntrnt [2004-07-25 17:12:28 +0000 UTC]

what about it?

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rntrnt In reply to moldygrape [2004-07-25 17:12:54 +0000 UTC]

i dont know

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DarkRockFaerie [2004-07-25 12:02:47 +0000 UTC]

I really like this one, its got more depth than some of your other ones......

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