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MrRemoraman — Through the Rye pg 9
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Violence, whether spiritual or physical, is a quest for identity and the meaningful. The less identity, the more violence.-Marshall McLuhan
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Oh boy- not sure what the pretense is for this, but I wasn’t expecting on seeing a cuddly character address some kiddies before things went to the badger or possum there to have his head cut off in mere capture- but overall the more surreal it feels, which is good.
I do like how you have this slanted look to the panels, especially on something like this. It feels almost lifeless, especially when the dragon character may or may not be a person in a costume. I do like how they stare off with all their eyes just looking not directly at the viewer but off to the side a bit. The expressionless characters do look nice, and the one with some sort of expression is the badger who looks rather surprised.
Since this is black and white, I do like how you have the blood pure black. Not to mention the Whack is hand drawn and looks nice rather than being something you’d find as part of a text or font. Thought it wouldn’t hurt to use fonts pre made from time to time, since this is a simple comic, it’s not really needed hear.
I will say though that the fonts due come out a bit hard to read in some places, but that’s fixable for next time, or whenever you wish. You have plenty of space to fit it in, and I do like the hand lettering used on it. The other thing that seems off is the way this comic is presented- it’s leaning to one side of the page literally. It would have been best to center the border around the comic and its panels, so it looks a bit more even.
Overall you’ve done a good job with the grim subject matter here. I like the hatching work used on the characters, and the overall detail added to the fuzzy wearing masked companion in the third as well. The wood grain texture on the cutting board looks nice, and it’s all done in a way to help give shading to the character with the intricate work.
Keep the Rye coming.
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Thank you! Yeah, my panels are a mess. I still handwrite most of it, but I'm more...cautious. I use straight edge and I try to keep it as legible as possible.
The progression on this gets worse with time. Each video is more surreal and disturbing than the last...
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Welcome.
And I sees. Interesting.
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It gets worse, if you can believe that...
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Yeah
The vids keep getting worse
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Well..
That's a tricky one to explain
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Oh that unnerving stare at the viewers, so absolutely creepy. And the one in the bear...I assume it is a costume...it reminds me so much of the creepypasta 1999. That feeling of watching something with a dirty, disturbing undertone that you just can't look away from. Very effective page, this really sets the mood that I think you are going for. Looking forward to more
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