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Published: 2006-01-10 17:04:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 148; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 4
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Call me crazy,But I cant deny,
I love to look at you,
You with a perpetually mischievous streak.
My shy smile conquers my face,
Like a necklace of pearls,
Gleaming and white,
Stretched tight by unseen hands.
But you don't see me,
I am as invisible as the ghosts that haunt you.
A phantom in the classroom.
A face among the masses.
You look at a more beautiful sight,
A stunning girl in the latest fashion.
Or are simply staring into the oblivion,
A dreamworld you can see, yet I cannot?
Are you looking at the teacher,
At what she scrawls endlessly on the sea green in front of us?
Or are you imagining you were someone else, somewhere else?
Or are you simply uninterested and doodling mindlessly in your notebook?
This I wonder,
Enthralled as I am by your easy grace,
And I pine for you,
You with your enchanting smile.
A hopeless cause,
For I am a nobody,
I have my friends
On the lower levels of school hierarchy.
What is it about me?
It the problem that I hate the tedious hours at the stores,
While most girls spend their allowance at the mall?
Is it that I don't wear make-up?
I feel it is a mark of insecurity.
But since I think freely,
I act upon instinct,
I become an outsider.
In a limbo state
Of being neither hated and pushed aside,
Nor loved and accepted.
This is me.
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Comments: 6
Phoenix789 [2007-07-13 13:16:58 +0000 UTC]
why did you have to be so friggin talented when you were 13? and now you're impossibly talented. gah somehow i hate wuv you but mostly wuv with a bit of envy thrown in. no real hate. derrrrrrr.....
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Gr3ywInd88 [2006-01-11 22:10:50 +0000 UTC]
Hey nice work. I know how it goes when you hit a dry spell, but I would love to read more of your work, so make sure you post it if you do write anything. One little typo I noticed. In the line "Are you looking a the teacher" I think you need a "t" to make the word "at", but other than that, it sounds wonderful. Though it is set in a female perspective, you captured a very human emotion, so I could relate with it even though I am in fact a guy. Good jorb there, and good luck with future endeavors.
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NailsForBreakfast In reply to Gr3ywInd88 [2006-01-13 18:24:16 +0000 UTC]
Gah! A typo? Thanks for telling me. I will fix it right away!
Thanks, I appreciate the compliment. ^.^
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NailsForBreakfast In reply to NailsForBreakfast [2006-01-13 18:39:24 +0000 UTC]
Um... maybe I wont. I can't seem to figure out how.
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Angryanddangerous1 [2006-01-10 21:00:52 +0000 UTC]
Congratulations - you're not an empty-headed bimbo!
..sorry. xD I did like that poem a lot; you shall be added to my watch list.
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NailsForBreakfast In reply to Angryanddangerous1 [2006-01-11 01:08:41 +0000 UTC]
O.o I got a comment! Yay! ^.^
Thanks for the compliment. I have to tell you, though, that if you're watching, you'll likely watch for a very long time... my creative process is very slow. And I am in the middle of finals... However, I will try to write sometime during my vacation.
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