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nostalgicstar — Fall to Vulnerability
Published: 2002-12-25 17:17:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 215; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 9
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Litter the blue carpet,with your stinging tears..
pictures of models you'll never be.
Dim the lights down low,
so your reflection isnt visible..
Let your soul fall to vulnerability.
Dont cry my love,
Not everyone is beautiful..
Not everyone was blessed with grace.
Your time is soon to come,
because even through the darkness..
the unfortunate find their way.
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wow...i dont even know what to say about this except the fact that i feel the same way! damn, you always write about everything that im feeling...your good!!
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we all get our moment in the light, no matter how dark the road. great poem, your quite talented
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first you take feelings that i find inside myself...then you take the things I say ( in a nutshell) to myself to feel better...like "youre beautiful, your talented, youre time will come..." THis poem is short but very powerful..thank you
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very very nice job, the imagery really works here to show how you feel. The lights down low, awesome
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i've read poems revolving around the same subject kind of, but this is the only one that i enjoyed, heh. my only suggestion would be to change the structure a bit. ie, instead of:
Dont cry my love,
Not everyone is beautiful..
Not everyone was blessed with grace.
i'd change it to
Don't cry, my love;
Not everyone is
beautiful.
Not everyone was
blessed with
grace.
but to do that you'd have to fool around with the other stanzas as well. just an idea. nice job.
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Just to spite you... Kidding. I enjoyed the read. Keep up the good work.
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This is beautiful..
I'm hoping this isn't written about you.... because you are so gorgeous.. I mean it I love you!
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Bit too far on the depressing side of things to me but it still has good flow and description.
But life isn't always happy and shit is depressing at times
Good piece
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I like this a lot...It flows so well. my favorite parts are the first stanza, and the last...
Amazing.
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dude. plus fave!
"Dont cry my love,
Not everyone is beautiful..
Not everyone was blessed with grace.
Your time is soon to come,
because even through the darkness..
the unfortunate find their way."
^ i love that part, i LOVE the ending you rock!
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