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Published: 2012-01-20 14:27:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 353; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 4
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Description Sometimes I wish for the taste of metal
The graceful ringing crunch
Of a blue sheet
Being pushed and pulled out of the civilised world
Only to return to another version of the
Unstructured wild it once came from
The only remnants of its past life:
Blue paint.

Sometimes I wish for the taste of metal
Of reflective glass splintering away
From a shiny silver page
That tells the stories of fleshy robots
Cynical and vain
Looking for aurbrushed photographs
In the simple dirty reflection of mechanical procedures.

Sometimes I wish for the taste of metal
Of small, rusted, shining shapes
Dully glinting in the brightest midday sun
Reflecting everything in the blackest night
Biting robots and drawing red
Turning even those who don't want to feel into a breathing creature

Sometimes I wish for the taste of metal
Of dull molded stell bent against
Shapely painted gold
And the uncivilised rush of everything shattered,
The truest reflection broken
In the leak of red that turns robots, in the last split second,
Human.
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Comments: 8

waffle26 [2012-04-14 03:36:15 +0000 UTC]

Very nice indeed. I like the first stanza.

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CuddleFish124 [2012-01-26 01:20:44 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow! I'm normally not the one to like poetry, but this is amazing! Good job!

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pari-a In reply to CuddleFish124 [2012-01-26 04:02:29 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow, thanks! <3

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CuddleFish124 In reply to pari-a [2012-01-26 05:51:06 +0000 UTC]

No problem!

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LittleWhiteFawn [2012-01-21 04:32:46 +0000 UTC]

It is the best you've written in a while.

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WildHorseUnderTheSea [2012-01-20 17:23:00 +0000 UTC]

its a little vague, but since its poetry, thats fine. i like how it has a theme throughout it, but the lines could fit together a little bit better. all in all, not bad. 3.5 out of 5 stars.

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pari-a In reply to WildHorseUnderTheSea [2012-01-20 20:59:49 +0000 UTC]

Its for a friend... She recently got in a car crash and her passenger died... So its supposed to be kind of vague so it isn't too traumatizing.

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WildHorseUnderTheSea In reply to pari-a [2012-01-20 22:20:17 +0000 UTC]

ah, well i hope that your friend recovers then.

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