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Published: 2016-06-26 04:22:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 746; Favourites: 19; Downloads: 0
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I now feel hated,because of your betrayal.
You stabbed me in the back,
and my world turns black.
I am bruised,
and now I am confused.
You are ignorant
for not trying to figure it out.
I feel the world is against me,
And I become depressed.
I feel so blue.
And I question, "what did I do?"
Even when I apologize,
I still have bursts of cries.
When is enough enough?
I am trying to stay tough,
even through my bad crimes.
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Thank you! It's okay if you critique my work. I want to get better!
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Mhm - you keep on writing and people will keep on commenting - you'll improve 
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If I have the time, I will definitely try to write more.
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I like this style of poetry, nice work. 
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Thank you so much!
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I'd first like to contribute on the subject with an agreeing quote by Confucius: "To hold a grudge or hate on someone is to drink poison and expect the other person to die."
Your chosen words hit well, and although the welcomed rhymes are irregular, you don't let rhyming get in the way of the overall feel. I like it a lot!
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Thank you for the kind words! I'm glad you like it.
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Very poignant... great expression indeed !!!Β Β
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welcome..Β
mind if i watch you ?
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Go right ahead!
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okay Β Β done..Β Β Β
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my pleasure..Β Β
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even when met with provocative intent, it is still the choice of the victim to react unless coerced
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That's true. Honestly I express my feelings in poems.
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these sound more like typical pop songs TBH
gotta go experimental
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I wish I can write songs lol
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try looking at the poems of maxnort and Unearthly-Demagogue.
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Alright, I'll check them out.
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I like that this poem is so honest. About whoever does not like you: YOU CANNOT PLEASE EVERYONE!! Haters gonna hate! Honestly, if you keep having a lot of fights with these girls, that is kind of a sign that they are just not real friends, and life is too short to spend it with people you do not like to be around. So, I hope it gets better for you.
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That is so true. These girls have problems and they don't take the blame for anything. I already did what I could and there's nothing more I can do now. Thank you for your comment.
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Alright then; I hope you can be surrounded by people who care for you and who you yourself care for!
You are very welcome!!
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Thank you! Same goes to you!
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Welcome!!!
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You're welcome!
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Wow! It IS Powerful like KellySeale says. I hope that's not what you're going through. If it is:..............................I'm sorry to hear what you're going through. There's so many bad things going on all over the world, that I believe some folks can't handle it, can't grasp the seriousness, can't release the anxiety. I believe some of those people take it out the very ones closest to them because that's their only way they know how to let it out. I may be wrong. But my intent in trying to explain my perspective is to make your hurtfulness, hurt less. That's all.Β
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Unfortunately, it is. I feel like I cannot have any feelings anymore. I have asked my so-called friend go please tell people to stop if they bring up our fight. Instead, she blew up saying she was busy with packing which I think is bull. She had screenshots and her phone was at 10%. But hey, I don't know why I bother my time on them. They certainly don't care about me, so why should I?
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There's more & more anger on the Planet. It's like a pimple getting ready to bust, (please forgive the gross analogy) but, EVERYTHING is going to pot & we are caring less & less about one another. That is what's truly happening & it is affecting families, friends &Β neighbors all over the world.Β I've found myself getting depressed years ago about work, finances, family, relationships & decided to Volunteer in an organization called the Community Emergency Response Team (CERT). That is what has distracted me from ALL of the Negativity around me and focus on learning First Aid & other things to help out my Family, Friends & Neighbors in case of large scale dangers that Weather & other big stuff that affects us all. My point is trying to show you that it is now time to focus on something Positive for YOU, for Your Life Style, Such as Art! Going to Museums, Photography, Traveling & seeing the World while it's still in one piece. There is too much Negativity & Ugliness on the Planet &Β YOU Dear,Β need to Focus on Good Things.Β Those People that are feeling down & using YOU to let their OWN frustrations on, are NOT your Friends. Think about it. Look out for yourself. You Will Come uponΒ TRUE friends in the future. Please Keep the Faith & Stay Strong Girl! That last statement you made: 'They certainly don't care about me, so why should I, (care about them)?' Is an accurate statement. NO ONE WILL TAKE BETTER OF YOU, THAN YOU YOURSELF! So keep On Keeping On Girl & Be Safe. May GOD Bless & Protect YOU & Your Family for Generations to Come!
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Finally, somebody said it! My mother thinks that their mentally ill and have problems. I want to get a job but there's always rude people involved. People take things for granted all the time and they are not thankful for it. You don't know what you lost until it's gone. If they ever come back, they can just forget it. I am done trying to please those people and it's never enough. They get into a pissy match with me and it never works out. Sometimes I feel like it's society, or using the words that they have been called and turning it against me. Thank you so much. It made me feel better. They are at heart camp now and I'm not going, I don't know if that will affect anyone or not? I have really bad anxiety, and they basically betrayed on me and gave up on me over someone else.
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Everyone is going through Changes Honey.Β Take Care of Yourself Dear.Β You'll be Happier for it.Β In the long run, you will KNOW who you can count on and who you can't.Β Like I said before, NO ONE will take better care of you than You Yourself.Β Blessings & Success to You & May GOD Protect You & Your Loved Ones for Generations to Come.!
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That's true. Hopefully I can forgive them. Can't change a tiger's stripes. I'm basically being told that they don't like me because they don't want to admit their wrong. Thank you so much for your support. It truly means a lot. 
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Thanks! You as Well M'Lady!
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You're very talented writer. π
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Yep , I guess you have real talent, I mean I usually not really like poems but I really like your poems (So far you are the only poem-writer who can write something that is actually interesting)
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Maybe the reason why I dislike poems in general is because in schools it's forced to read poems (which are mostly Hungarian poems)
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Me neither. That actually means a lot.
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Well , Hungarian Poems are pretty much about 'self-sorrying after country's brilliant ideas backfired' and 'begging help from god' (Literally)
Also most Hungarian poems I readed pretty much sounded like the writers want to make the 'Hungarian' state look superior or make it's past mistakes blurred, well I always kinda disliked Hungarian mythology and literature. (I'm not saying I dislike every literature which is writen in Hungary, but I dislike most of them)
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Bleh, sounds like boring crud to me! I never really payed attention to proms. Hmm... Most of them were written during wars, such as the Civil War, World War II, etc. The most creepiest poem I ever read is called "The Raven". It is seriously creepy and sad. You can find the audio on YouTube.
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Yep , it is kinda boring and dislikable... and yet they force everyone in schools to learn them...
Well.. Temporary Memory is quite useful for this, I not want something like that stick in my mind longer than two weeks...
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