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Shorter update this time, because I didnt count the page count per scene this chapter so keeping a consistent number would've cut us off at a weird spot. But I really love how this one turned out above all the others so I hope you enjoy nonetheless!
Author's Notes:
-OH MAN. So I was really nervous going into this because the rest of my colors have been popping this chapter, but I initially wasn't sure how to make night look interesting and not just...regular blue night colors. Needless to say I did ALOT of experimenting...and ended up with a color scheme very similar to a super old piece of mine so apparently this been in me the whole time--[BRICKED]
- This particular section acts as the follow up to the extra - Into the Night , in which Steven and his adoptive dad Drake become adoptive dads to ghost boy hazen. The family's all here this time around, with the inclusion of ghastly older sis. Speaking of which
- P H O E B E. Phoebe is another character similar to Steven and Drake, who didn't have much going for them in the games. They were kind of loosely defined slates for me to throw some character onto, and Phoebe in particular presented a very interesting opportunity considering her role in the games
Here's a question. Once cellphones get more developed in hoenn, and people start referring to being ignored as being "ghosted", is that insensitive to people who can actually ghost-[BRICKED]- So im aware that this chapter has alot of character storyline transitions and I wanted to say im super sorry for that. I hope it isn't too confusing or annoying ^w^" I've definitely gone over my "Transition Quota" this time around, but in the future chapters shouldn't be so...loaded lollΒ
For now though, I hope you enjoy briefly peeking into the lives of characters other than Asadi and the troupe!
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The pallet on this section of the chapter is very lovely, the warm hues blend nicely with the darkened scenery. I think that first landscape we see is a great way to give us a scope for the space between towns/shoreline.
The dynamics between Steven and Drake feel like a well-worn friendship, I love how the two are equally eeried out by Phoebe's laughter. It gives a good depth to her character that we see and don't have to have it written out.
Phoebe is a new addition that I think has a great introduction into the story. Slightly odd with a fun vibe, I am deeply loving the final Slightly-Translucent pose at the end she strikes with her ghosts, like she is as incorporeal as them! Both cute, and creepy.
Looking at the story overall, this is a good check in an all our characters we've had spaced apart for a while now! This chapter has a nice clear Change-of-Perspective that keeps the flow going smoothly. Having three different viewpoints can be confusing when the chapters are split pages, as then the connecting pages might not seem to make sense, but you've avoided that nicely.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
The change in focus would be my only major critique to watch out for I think, having too much to split between could pull back on the quality of some of the scenes.
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First of all, thanks a bunch for the crit! Your insight is always appreciated and helpful 
That being said,
I am deeply loving the final Slightly-Translucent pose at the end she strikes with her ghosts, like she is as incorporeal as them! Both cute, and creepy.
I found this pretty interesting, as it really shows the different ways a scene can be interpreted differently from your own intentions haha But to clarify, Phoebe is, infact, translucent here. She becomes as incorporeal as her ghosts, in the same way that Hazen has in the past . And I can't wait to explore the reasoning behind that later on.
As for the focus changes, you bring up a very good point as far as quality of scenes goes! That's definitely something I'm going to be keeping in mind going foward. There's still a scene split or two left in this chapter though, so I hope you can bare with me just a bit longer ^_^"
Thanks again!!
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I really like your take onΒ Phoebe being more spontaneous and interest in horror things.Β Β
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Thanks!! She's incredibly creepy and even more incredibly comfortable in that fact
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THANKS!! You can see the full version of her design in the sketchdump for this chapter , but she was one of the most interesting characters to redesign from the games. Her gimmick is being ghastly and creepy, even when you approach her in the elite 4, but she looks like a normal girl on the outside. The contrast is pretty cool, but I wanted to push her appearance a little bit further to make her slightly more otherwordly. And in turn, this ended up giving her a completely separate role in the story itself, a happy accident
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Nice! You are welcome!
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I LOVE PHOEBE!! I'll get a real critique done later but! I wanted to say that now :3
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THANKS 
Also, yaaayy! Look foward to it <3 <3Β
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ya can't hide from tricksy little ghosties!
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heheheh tricksy little ghosties. I like that
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