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Published: 2003-06-29 02:28:24 +0000 UTC; Views: 5175; Favourites: 84; Downloads: 843
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I wait. I prepare for an arrival that will never occur.You said you'd be here, but you've said that before,
Only to leave me standing here, foolishly holding
My heart in my hands, broken and silent.
You ask. I give. You beg. I give. You insist
That I stand still, not moving to the left or right,
While you roam freely and openly, leaving me
To follow you, and close my heart once more.
If I could say to you what's on my mind, I'd tell you I love you.
I'd tell you I want you. I'd tell you of the hurt and anger that
Simmer under my skin, but I keep silent because I know the cost.
I know that no matter what is said or done, I am wrong, as always.
I wish I could climb a tree, to the very top until there
Was nothing but sky between me and the stars.
I'd stretch out my hands to touch them, feel their energy
Thrilling through me. But I can't even get to the top of the tree.
I stay behind, head down, because I love you. I watch you touch
The stars, receive their energy and then magnify it out
To the world. I smile when you smile. I cry when you are sad.
Because I adore you so, I dare not ask if I may touch them too.
I know, because you love me, you hold me close.
I know, because you adore me, you keep me with you.
I know that there is no one else but you for me, so
I shut myself in, close my eyes and imagine what isn't.
And now I wait. Wait for you to return from touching the stars,
Breathing their essence. I am standing here stupidly smiling
as you fail to appear. I am standing silent, my broken heart in my hands.
Because I love you. Because I want you. Because you said so.
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this REALLY REALLY REALLLLYY GOOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Wow, I really like the last line, and the poem is quite bittersweet- can't think of any other words because it's not quite sweet, and not quite bitter... aha-_-"
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Thank you! It is a little of both, I suppose.
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No probs. Heh, ok, so I lack vocab lol. I can live with that
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haha here's another comment..
it feels like you've written this poem exquisitely for me, like you know exactly what i'm going through.. and it's comforting to know i'm not alone..for that i thank you from the bottom of my heart
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I can't tell you how much it means to me to know that my poem meant that much to you! 
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I can't tell you how much it means to me that my poem makes you feel that way!
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Beautiful and very fitting for most all of us at some point in our lives. Well written. 
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Thank you! Even though I posted this poem over two years ago, I still regularly get comments, which I am always thankful for.
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You are welcome. I love when that happens.
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this makes me feel one way...ow...but theres so much beauty in this written pain. i love it. amazing...truly amazing.
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the level on which i can relate to this is so uncanny it's scary....
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Wow! Thank you so much! And thank you for the 
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awesome. really.
this explains so much in such an unusual manner.
thank you for writing this.
+fav.
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Thank you so, so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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That was painfully beautiful. The structure, the order, the visceral emotion and shy statements, they are all as amazing as they are piercing and awful. And so visual too!
This is my favourite poem I have seen on deviantart. kudos ^^
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Bella Bella
I really love the contrast, its seriously an amazing work of art
Pleas drop in and let me know what you think of "Alone and Lost"
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Thank you so, so much! I'll go an read "Alone and Lost" now!
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sigh. very beautiful. true in many cases...
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Thank you very much!
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Wow. I read this and now I have shivers up and down my spine... it's just that good. I can tell there's a lot of emotion behind it.
Amazing poem, write more! (I shall have to check out your gallery now)
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Thank you so much! I'll have to write some more soon, once my life settles down a bit!
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No problem. It's always nice to see a person who can write poems well on dA.
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that is amazing...wow! i love the way u wrote it, it's really different! Good Job primowalker
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Thank you so much! I'm constantly amazed that I continue to get comments and
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Amazing - just grabbed right at my heart - and not much does that to that extent.
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Thank you so, so much! I can't tell you what it means to hear people tell me that my poem moved them.
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This is brilliant. Hits so damn close to home. Beautiful. +fav
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Thank you so, so much!
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Aww, poor guy.
This poetry is riddled with such emotion that the artistry behind it cannot be denied. Excellent piece, brilliant work, keep it up!
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okie i could have absolutely SWORN i commented on this months ago, but i was just reading it again and noticed that for some reason, i didn't? but i remember doing it. oh well, i guess i'm sorry i'm so extremely late. lol.
well anyway, i want you to know that i read this poem almost every single day - i kid you not. this is the best and most beautiful and touching poem i have ever read in my entire LIFE. my favorite piece of writing in the world, no joke. i am absolutely in love with it. when i read it i want to cry, perhaps because it brings up some emotions deep inside of me that burn there so brightly, yet i try so hard to ignore them. this is absolutely amazing. the first time i read it, i -literally- had tears streaming down my face.
okay that's all, i just wanted you to know that. after all these 3948203942 times i've read this, it still leaves me in absolute AWE.
i don't even have the words to say.
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Wow. I honestly don't know what to say. No one has ever said anything like this about my writing. Sure, I've gotten compliments, but to realize that words I wrote have effected someone so much is just overwhelming. Thank you so very, very much for letting me know how much it means to you. I will cherish your words you have written here as much as you seem to cherish mine.
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you are eternally welcome, and i am eternally thankful.
you are incredible.
absolutely incredible.
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wow...i am so proud of ...you took a badexperience and made a beautiful poem. just remember it is her, not you
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Thank you so much! And thanks for the
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All I can really say about this piece is, Amazing.
--
"It is not whether I love you , but whether I like you."
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Thank you so much! I am constantly surprised that I keep getting such wonderful comments about this poem. It it very pleasing to me to know that it has a effect on so many. Thank you.
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Oh my god... i don't usually say that, i think it makes me sound like a ditz... but wow! that is a really great poem!
My fav part:
And now I wait. Wait for you to return from touching the stars,
Breathing their essence. I am standing here stupidly smiling
as you fail to appear. I am standing silent, my broken heart in my hands.
Because I love you. Because I want you. Because you said so.
that is an awesome ending...i really, really, like this poem
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Wow! Thank you so much! I can't tell you how happy it makes me that you like it so much!
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