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Push-The-ButtonOCT — Chapter/Round 3 (And SE 2) RESULTS!
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"You know I think we set a record for longest OCT Round! What's important though is that you guys all made it through thanks to THE POWER OF FRIENDSHIP! So for that, congratulations! This round had a lot of awesome entries so without further ado..."
"Without further ado..."
"Hey Narrator? Are you going to interrupt me? Want to say a few words or make a jab or...something?"
"How about I do my job and you do yours?"
"Um...ok if you're sure."
MATCH 1: DR JONAH VS NEMIS & ZENO!
RageWay (Dr. Jonah)
This story hits the ground running with a lot of fun cameos and entertaining interactions. The conversation between Franklyn and Jonah especially had me curious of your plans for them. The design work was top notch from the dramatic first page to the transition between the story swap. Even little details like wizard cloak designs left me smiling the whole time. There's also a big improvement in the clarity of the final pages compared to the prior entry which I applaud. However rush still seems to have left its damage. The second part doesn't have much to it and the conclusion seems to pop up out of nowhere. Still a great entry from the Doctor with a touch of magic that's impossible to ignore.
Schizobot (Nemis & Zeno)
From somber start to heart-pounding finish with a lot of quirky fun in between, this story manages to be an excellent balance. The way both stories play into each other and Nemis' development is really impressive. Along with some great art and world building (the transition of Raven to background characters was a neat way to include cameos), not to mention those incredible bonus pages and its not hard to see how you've come this far. I do think Jonah could have used a just a bit more personal character, perhaps with his scientific side, and the beginning could have had a smoother transition but overall an awesome story that leaves readers dying for more.
RageWay (Dr. Jonah)
First of all, I really like the opening page. Very creative uses of text boxes and paneling with the Narrator’s dialogue. This round was definitely a step up in clarity from your last round for the most part, which paid off in terms of giving us good expressiveness and more clear character interactions. It did start becoming a bit hard to tell what was happening in some places towards the end. I’d also keep an eye on your speech bubble placements - sometimes they were in a strange order that made it hard to tell the order that they were supposed to be read in.
This round had a lot of great development. The plot really picks up here, but you don’t sacrifice well done character interactions. I really like the creative paneling when Nemis and Jonah try to summon Blade, as well as when they finally push the button. You end on a great cliffhanger with Zeno as well.
In my opinion, I think the opening of this round needed a little bit more room to breathe while Nemis dealt with what he had just done at the end of round 2. Things tended to move along and the joke where Nemis and Jonah suddenly gain a ton of magical knowledge sort of soured the tone for me. On the other hand, Nemis does have a really emotional moment about this later in the round, which WAS well done.
RageWay (Dr. Jonah)
First off, I love the Harry Potter reference in the magic story... Of course, Alex is the school's equivalent of the defense against the dark arts teacher lol. I did kinda want to know a bit more as to why the narrator was so insistent on the void's history being unknown, as well as what the deal with two characters from your OC's normal story being here. I did, however, feel that the latter half was a bit rushed, but you did provide a reasonable reason for this in the story as the plan was to quickly wrap it up to reach the void and reach the narrator who mysteriously stopped communicating with the others.
Schizobot (Nemis & Zeno)
Oh man... This was a really good read. I like how the characters tried to take advantage of the story they were in order to bring back some of the others, and how that was the cause for the glitch/swap incident. I also really liked how you took advantage of the OTHER story and made it connected to your own character's home story... Then having them use their own memory of events to solve the problem was a clever move. Then there was the stuff after the end of the main part... oh boy that cliffhanger and the final shot of the comic was just fantastic, nicely done... Also... while I typed these out, I noticed something that has gotten me even MORE excited... the key that was used to open the static door in the abyss, it seemed like it was the one found in Alex's core... now it makes me wonder why that key was in his core, why the strange being didn't do much until after his core had been shattered, and if it had some effects before gaining its own body in the magic story... so many mysteries and it's gotten me excited to see what you do from here. ^_^ I hope you can pull off the ending because the cliffhanger has me wondering about so many questions when it comes to the door, the strange being, the story that was never told, and even Alex's part in this since he was the one with the key in his literal heart.
RageWay (Dr. Jonah)
Your entry manages to make me interested right off the bat with its plot and the interaction between The Narrator and Jeremy. And seeing another side of Jonah especially when he saw his husband makes me feel sad for him and I found that kissing part was pretty heartwarming to see.However there are some pages that took me a moment to understand what is happening due to it has the same problem like in your previous round entry. Especially when comes to visual storytelling, there’s some parts failed to convey the feelings that readers should feel when reading your entry. But there are some parts that work out pretty well and granted because of how limited time you have to finish the entry.You still need some improvement on execute your story better. Try to have a better time management so you able to polish your visual storytelling more better if you can and cut some parts of the story if you have to in order to make your entry more consistent and organized. I do like the role you gave for Jeremy and his special connections to Dr. Jonah, along with the story. I’m looking forward to see any potential plot you will give for both of them! I’m quite curious how this story will goes next.
The thing that I like the most when comes to your entry is how well the story paced out and how it manages to deliver the feel in the story. Despite your entry aren’t fully polished, the clarity in both storytelling and art visual aspect are still pretty strong enough for me to not only understand what’s happening, but also good enough to captivate me until the end. Especially at the end.I also like how you also show your opponent’s side of the story and the contestants that he encountered before in the tournament without overshadowing Nemis story. Especially how you show that Jonas are quite similar Nemis in a way and there’s something that they can relate themselves together- which is losing the ones they loved over a button as an example. I always love this way of character interaction and bonding to make them to know each other better, and it’s great that you didn’t waste that potential.
Overall, you did pretty great in your entry as always. Try to keep it up and I’m looking forward to see how this story will turns out!
AND THE WINNER IS...
Nemis & Zeno!
MATCH 2: AVERY & VIRGIL VS THE BARD!
AND THE WINNER IS...
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AND THE WINNER IS...
...
"Ahem!"
"Heh heh...about that. It looks like we've got our first double drop out of the tournament."
"What!? Now!?"
"Don't worry remember? That's what the Spectator Tournament is for! We'll just pick out the top winner from there!"
"Of course. More people abandoning ship...even closer to-"
"What was that?"
"Just get on with it!"
"Okay! Okay! Let's see here..."
Sorriel in the role of Various
The Narrator says...
"A cute but confusing journey to no place in particular. Some focus and clarity would help although Matilda's farewell was tragically charming."
You have received..
TWO POINTS!
Bradley in the role of Jonah
The Narrator says...
"A huge improvement from your last entry. Bradley's emotions and revelations were fantastic and only minor padding and a cluttered final part held this one back.."
You have received..
FOUR POINTS!
Raven & Regina (but mostly Regina) in the role of Hollow
The Narrator says...
"This story had lots of potential with its character/backstory combo. Sadly, it came out pretty half-baked without much inspiration behind it."
You have received..
TWO POINTS!
Blade in the role of Zeno & Nemis
The Narrator says...
"In spite of redundancy and spelling errors, this story was excellent. The artwork was top notch and the way Spirit and the flashbacks were incorporated was brilliantly done."
You have received..
FOUR POINTS!
Hollow in the role of Castias
The Narrator says...
"Hollow was adorable in his journey to control his powers and the writing was wonderful. Sadly the connection to Castias never quite came through and it felt like parts were skipped or missing."
You have received..
THREE POINTS!
Fi & Castias in the role of Each Other
The Narrator says...
"A nice look into the past with a good balance between characters and some wonderful interactions. However, lack of conflict and a somewhat dry ending leaves this story lacking."
You have received..
THREE POINTS!
Narrator's Pick
Current Leader
"Which means that our Comeback Contestant will be..Bradley Hunt!"
"Congratulations to Haff! We'll be sending you a message to confirm your reinstatement in the tournament!"
"Nice to see that extra effort paying off. Now I hope everyone's ready for the final round! It's been such a crazy awesome ride and I'm glad to announce that for the last of our time together, we're going to-"
"No."
"What was that?"
"No...No No No! This is NOT I want this to go at all!"
"Huh? But it's the last round? Shouldn't we do something specia-"
"We shouldn't be having this last round! Not now! Most tournaments have five rounds you know and those didn't even have me to keep them interesting! Now we have people running off to other tournaments and disappearing without a trace!"
"Ok seriously Narrator? What's going on with you? You've been acting really weird. Last round's meltdown, barely even talking in the chatroom..."
"There is nothing going on with me!"
"Well then would you mind calming down? You're acting especially jerk-ish and I need to announce when the last round is going to be?"
"You've certainly gotten bolder, haven't you? Have you forgotten who I am?"
"No...it's more like I just remembered."
"No."
"I mean, we both know what's really going on here. Why you're getting antsy here but not in everyone else's entries."
"Miss Me. That. Is. Enough."
"You just don't want the tournament to end because-"
"..."
"Miss Me?"
"..."
"Now that's more like it! What do I need her for anyway? I'm The Narrator! This is my tournament! I'll say and make things the way I want them! And what I want is..."
"That's it...THAT'S IT!"
"Lessers and Knockoffs! I hope I have your attention! Now that I've fired the riffraff, I think it's time I give you people what you really want! Stay tuned while I set up and don't worry."
"This is my story, after all."
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