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Rainsplashed — Fallen in Time--Part 1
Published: 2004-02-04 19:48:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 85; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 5
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Description "You wanted to know what it was like to be dead...here's your chance, Jesse."

A darkened face smirked, and slid into the shadows. Jesse lay on the ground, the moon's rays filtering through his windows.  His vision grew fuzzy as he looked down, a knife peircing his torso.

His shaky pale hands barely gripped the handle of the knife.  The pain seared through him as he slid the knife out, his blood flowing freely.  He expected to die, and tossed the knife as far accross the room as he could.

His eyes widened as his arm began to seemingly dissolve, his body fading into nothing.  He felt a wierd pang, then blacked out.

"Do you wish to live? To breath fresh air, Jesse?"
Jesse sat up slowly, putting a hand to his head to stop the pain. Where was he? Was he alive...?
"I can make you live again.  You can see the sky again."  The strange voice continued to coo, but Jesse was too dazed to listen.  He shook his head, ignoring the pain that crept in further.
"I said, Do you want to take the test of life again?"  

A female (or so it apeared) stepped out of the infinate black, the sorce of the melodous voice.  She brushed a hand across where the knife had been, and then spoke again.
"I can give you the gift of life, Jesse. Take it, or leave it."

Jesse floated, and thought about the offer.  He slowly nodded. "I'll take it."

He felt a vacuum form under him, and he began to fall...

Part Two Coming Soon!
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Comments: 9

toxic-scars [2004-02-06 07:43:41 +0000 UTC]

Just going to check the other piece, this shows promise...

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FrozenFears [2004-02-05 21:37:33 +0000 UTC]

...

I had a poem named Fallen you know.

Other than that, it's good.

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Rainsplashed [2004-02-05 14:57:37 +0000 UTC]

Darn. I just spoiled it, didn't I?

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darknightsky12 [2004-02-04 23:01:38 +0000 UTC]

This is good ... for a story you really need more background though. This seems more like a climax than a beginning! But the idea sounds really cool.

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Rainsplashed In reply to darknightsky12 [2004-02-05 14:42:25 +0000 UTC]

Heh heh. Thanks. He is going to have the flashback in one of the later parts, which will explain the reason he got murdered and such.

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fairy980 [2004-02-04 20:57:32 +0000 UTC]

very interesting I love it hehehhe keep up the gd work and yes u should continue......come on the suspence is killing me! I wanna know wht happens to jesse!!! come on hehehhee

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Rainsplashed In reply to fairy980 [2004-02-04 21:10:21 +0000 UTC]

Lol. Looks like I came up with an exciting plot for once in my life.

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fairy980 In reply to Rainsplashed [2004-02-04 21:14:30 +0000 UTC]

hehe yep!

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Rainsplashed [2004-02-04 19:55:25 +0000 UTC]

Let me knwo if I should continue this. ^-^

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