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Description OC-training Round 7, Task 2.
Body Type/Profile:  Draw your character in their underwear showing scars, markings, tattoos and anatomy.  Also include 4 basic expressions.  Optionally you can add a three word personality description and a theme song/tune.

In the shortest terms possible, Aesha was caught in a rift from another dimension and physically changed.  She gained what some people might call a superpower but it's actually a horrible curse.  She can never learn to control it and shes a danger to everyone around her, having accidentally killed or crippled people.
Find the full explaination of Task 1; Guess Who at the end of the description.

DESCRIPTION:
Here we have one of the initial physical exams carried out on Aesha by the scientists and doctors.
As a result of the changes inflicted by exposure to the other realm, as you can see in the main picture, her stomach and associated organs have atrophied meaning that her waist/torso seems anorexic in appearance.  It's also resulted in a loss of approximately 15% of her body mass, though she remains healthy otherwise.

The only real giveaway of her nature is her eyes.  Each eye changes colour completely randomly and individually, lasting between one and three minutes.  Seeing her with two different coloured eyes is disconcerting enough, but when one changes in front of you, it's more so.

The attached X-Ray shows the shrivelled nature of her former organs, she no longer needs to eat or drink, gaining energy from the colour she absorbs.  In fact it's difficult for her to eat or drink more than a mouthful or two.  The highlighted organ is actually a new organ that has replaced them and processes the energy and turns it into bodily fuel.

You can read the scientist's full report here AP 0112 - Initial Report (Aesha Task 2 Part 2)
And if you're wondering about the AP-0112 bit.  All the effected people were found to have been changed in some manner.  Collectively they were labeled as Altered-Persons (AP).  The number is Aesha's identifier.  She was the 112th person examined.  And yes the clothing does look sort of prison/Guantamello Bay, doesn't it.  After all you can't have those nasty AP's mixing with real people, or sneaking out.


TASK 1; GUESS WHO - EXPLAINED.

As most of you surmised, it was picture of two halves   The past and the present/future.
The past was drawn on shards of broken glass, representing the shattering of Aesha's life during The Event.  Previously, Aesha had a good, loving family and was particularly close to her younger sister who was nicknamed Poppi.  However, she found the strictures of Indian culture, at least for girls, to be unfair; one in particular but I'll cover that in a later task.  (I can't give away everything yet ).  She rebelled by drinking hard and partying harder, often ending in love of the one-night type.  Which tarnished her reputation among the staid Indian community.  Which was kind of the point.
She was studying at university, majoring in Art and Sculpture as she had a talent for it, but little actual interest.  The sculpting, like the University, was a means to an end.

This all ended with The Event which I couldn't really fit in here with everything else
The Event was an explosion at Newcastle University where she attended.  But it wasn't just any explosion, it was an experiment gone terribly wrong.  The explosion ripped a hole in space-time to an alternate dimension.  A dimension that was nothing like ours.  Where the very laws of physics and nature were completely different and foreign.

Of the 1300 or so students and faculty caught at ground zero, 317 survived the initial event.  Exposure to the other dimension changed everyone radically.  All the males, bar 3, died.  Generally horribly and in pain.  Some were never found.  Some remains were so twisted as to be unrecognisable, right down to a DNA level.  Something on that side reacted badly to the male genome.  Of the 314 female survivors, all came back... changed.  The media have thrown around the word superpowers, at least before the media blackout, but it's more like a curse.  More than half of the survivors were killed by some factor of their new ability.  The others were left with an ability that they had no way of Ever learning to control, all of which were unique and usually dangerous to themselves and others.

Aesha and 4 of her friends escaped the ruins of the university and sealed off the rift in an act of self-presevervation.  The military then swooped in and quarantined the whole area.  Locking all the survivors in a 'Hospital' where they could be 'protected and eventually cured'.  Or basically tested like lab rats.
Eventually Aesha and 2 of her friends broke out and went on the run.

Aesha's curse is that she drains the colour from everything around her.  Which doesn't sound terrible until you realise that in doing so she sucks out the objects... or person's energy until they literally come apart at a molecular level, turning into ash.  And she can't turn it off.  Ever.  And though it's generally little more than background radiation, it can spike without warning disintergrating everything around her, so far measured up to a maxmum of 15' in all directions. 

She has accidentally killed at least one person and crippled one of the researchers (Simon, in the wheelchair).  She also once used it to destroy someone on purpose.  Someone she knew.  And though she had absolutely no choice, it still haunts her.

Oh, and in case there is someone out there I haven't linked it to, here is a 3 page short story that introduces Aesha and her world; Requiem For A Ghost
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Comments: 35

SunsetBlazer [2017-08-29 17:21:45 +0000 UTC]

Excellent job on her body-type, what with her organs for digestion disseminated.  Her expressions are really well done, too--I'm especially fond of sadness; it's quite a dramatic expression.  I love her ever-shifting heterochromia, too!
The story is such an interesting concept; I'm so intrigued!  Curious how a vast majority of the men were killed... what was different about the 3 survivors?  Why were they so lucky (though, that's probably not an appropriate word.  None of these people are all that lucky. )

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Raqonteur In reply to SunsetBlazer [2017-08-30 20:54:09 +0000 UTC]

Thank you
I like the way the expressions came out, especially sadness as you pointed out, it's the tear tracks that make that one for me, and fear where her face is several shades paler which was an experiment in techniques

A dimension or universe outside ours would operate by laws and structures we couldn't possibly understand, unless perhaps we were gibberously insane.  Perhaps it's best to say those three survived because they were less affected than the other males.  Perhaps there was a stronger link to their Y (female) chromosone, who's to say? 
Everyone who went through was affected, females less so than males, which is why they... survived.  Most of the males were so badly affected it was fatal on a scale we can't even comprehend.  Even the 3 males who survived were vastly more affected than any of the girls.  2 are detailed in comments below, the 3rd... well even I haven't decided on him.  Yet.

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RitellianCaptain [2017-07-15 05:39:04 +0000 UTC]

Wow, I was totally off!  What a fascinating story!  Is there a reason that the dimension was more lethal to men?  I especially like the idea about draining colors on a molecular level.   I can't wait to see this play out!  
  

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Raqonteur In reply to RitellianCaptain [2017-07-20 15:16:28 +0000 UTC]

Heh, not surprising.  I would have been amazed if anyone had guessed it perfectly (and would probably be reaching for the tin-foil hat to deflect the brain-stealing signals ).

I don't think there is a reason that can be explained.  After all, the very laws of reality are radically, inexplicably different there.  That's the problem.  Some males did survive, but not many, and all were changed to a much greater degree.  Perhaps males are just more susceptible?

Thank you.  None of the alterations are particularly nice, read some of the replies below if you haven't seen what happened to some of her friends yet.  But I have a thing about world-building and internal logic, so everything has to make sense to me

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RitellianCaptain In reply to Raqonteur [2017-10-10 03:15:06 +0000 UTC]

Lol, that is true! XD
  
 That is so interesting!  That is great that you make sure everything makes sense, it lends believability!

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Birdhousebirdy [2017-07-11 04:42:06 +0000 UTC]

Hehe, I read your response to my guess, and I was quite off.
I absolutely love the eye color changes.
But I do feel quite bad for her! Seems the alternate reality really did a number on her. She must be incredibly lonely with that kind of power. Can she learn to control it? I see that she can never turn it off, but she can still talk to others, right?

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Raqonteur In reply to Birdhousebirdy [2017-07-20 15:10:36 +0000 UTC]

Not really surprising, there aren't many minds as twisted as mine out there

Thank you, and yes, as cool as they are, they make it quite difficult for her to disguise herself.  You can't wear dark glass all the time.

Lonely?  Yes, she is.  She comes from a gregarious culture and has shown a definite liking for the company of men   She can still interact with people but she has to be careful not to spend too much time around a particular person, and to be aware of the fact that she is probably a ticking timebomb.  Sooner or later, she will go boom and take out everything within ten feet or so of her.

Right now, more than lonely, she is angry, or at least very, very irritated.
But there is actually an upside for her in this.  It has got her a probably permanent reprieve on something terrible that was going to happen to her.  I mean, it's swapping one terrible thing for another but at least she has some say in this one (at least now she has escaped).

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Drayah [2017-07-10 18:44:16 +0000 UTC]

Oh my goodness that's a terribly traumatic life that she has! It's even worse than I guessed! What a horrible event! It makes a super an awesome premise though! 

I love how her eye color changes, it's like the color that she sucks out of everything around her shows up in her eyes, coloring the way she sees the world through what she consumes, hmm. I wonder if she'll ever find a way to control her powers. 

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Raqonteur In reply to Drayah [2017-07-20 15:01:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, and yes it is awful.

I'm afraid she won't ever be able to control her alteration.  This was never intended as a superhero story but as a transformation horror.  Those abilities aren't from this reality, they don't belong here and they don't work according to our physical laws/laws of nature.  So how could anyone ever hope to understand or control them?

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Drayah In reply to Raqonteur [2017-07-21 15:30:37 +0000 UTC]

Aw that's so sad and tragic! But there is certainly a place for stories like this, sadly life is sometimes like that, with no happy superhero resolution.

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Cyber-Cypher [2017-07-10 01:35:10 +0000 UTC]

My, what a horrible backstory for Aesha..... (Sucking colors, huh? Sure sound simple and safe but reality had to jump in. :C)

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Raqonteur In reply to Cyber-Cypher [2017-07-20 14:57:13 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, life sucks for Aesha...
Sorry

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Cyber-Cypher In reply to Raqonteur [2017-07-20 21:14:01 +0000 UTC]

NOO! Reality, why!?! ;A;

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MegaMaeve [2017-07-09 12:14:39 +0000 UTC]

Oh Aesha...! I already commented on Requiem For A Ghost, so you already know that I find Aesha to be a great point-of-view character. She's got a good overview of the happenings, she's got a clear voice of her own, and it's very much clear she's got an incredible yet saddening and horrifying story to tell, too. I hope to reply to your answers sometime soon, once I've got a little more time :')


I really feel like your coloring skills improved a lot over the course of the past half year I've been watching your entries in the OC-T, and I cannot help but be incredibly impressed with your marker skills! The shading of Aesha's darker skin tone is subtle and soft - which is hard to achieve with markers! - and I simply love the color scheme you used! It's clear how much thought you put into her design, framing this piece as part of a research paper, and her bicolored ever-changing eyes really are something else! Her expressions look heartfelt, and I especially think Aesha's sad expression is striking. It's haunting almost (and for some reason, I really like how you drew her nose. You use microns to create the line art, right? It looks nice! ^^)


As I said before, it's clear you put a lot of thought into Aesha's design - and that you almost put even more thought into developing the horrifying situation she found herself in. The Other Dimension sounds like a horrifying place to be, twisting people into something... alien, up to their genetic even. Aesha's previous life got ripped apart by a tear in space and time, and it ruined her body, her friends, her home - and possibly, her mind as well, though I'm not sure what's worse: being mutated into a color-sucking, semi-human being, or being experimented on for the former reason. Her life's a harsh one, filled with struggling to live, to survive, to exist - and to keep seeing colors in life, when she literally sucks the color out of her vicinity. She's a strong-willed girl, loyal to her friends, and with a heavy burden on her back. 


It's sadistic, I know, but I can't wait to see what kind of horrors she'll face, or has faced already. (But that being said, I hope, more than anything, that she'll be able to have a somewhat peaceful, gentle life at the end of her story. Oh, Aesha...!)



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Raqonteur In reply to MegaMaeve [2017-07-20 14:56:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you
I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and thank you again for the compliment.  It does help to have a large selection of markers available.  I've got something like 120 out of 380!  Some differences in colour are so subtle that I can't make them out with the naked eye.  And yes. moving onto a darker skinned girl was an interesting challenge.  Though really, Aesha should be a few shades darker than what she is, I just couldn't find the right colour combo at the moment.

For the line art, I tend to use whatever I have.  At the minute I'm using Stabilo 0.3mm because the tip went on my last Copic fineliner.  For thicker and thinner lines I still have some old cheap generic fine-liners that came as a set (0.1mm-0.5mm).

I think the two go pretty much hand in hand.  I couldn't have designed her without that other place and vice-versa.  You've probably noticed I'm quite detail orientated, and that world design is a passion of mine.  I can't stand logic flaws in stories (and films; just saw the new Transformers film last (k)night ...Heh-hem gravitational effects of a large planetary body... anyone?... and no it wasn't great but it wasn't unwatchable... barely, and my 13-year-old son loved it).  Where was I?  
I think I'll quantify your statement there.  The 'other place' sounds like a horrifying place for humans to be.  That's because we don't belong there.  The rules that govern reality are completely different there.  It'd be like sticking a Jellyfish in the vacuum of space.  Of course, if there's anything or anyone that actually lives there, it would be the most natural place in the world.
To save going over the details too many times, read my replies to the next two or three comments below this to get an idea how alien it is.

She might be anti-authority but after she escapes the scientists/military figure out that there is a very specific and very good use for her abilities, controlled or not.  And she is not going to like it one bit.  Follow the logic through of what her abilities do, and what the others abilities are capable of, and you might just figure it out.

As to a happy ending, that's not really on the cards for any of the AP's.  They underwent gross physical and genetic changes, and those manifest abilities are like still affected by events on the other side (sunspots, tides, magnetic flares or the equivalents) that can't be predicted or planned for on this side.  Not to mention the psychological damage of both visiting the other side, however briefly, and having to deal with the aftereffects on both their lives and the lives of those around them.
However, Dianne (Dynamo) the de facto leader of the APs, pulls off a complicated plan that gets the military scientist in charge of their capture and incarceration to admit they were knowingly held without sentence or jurisdiction and experimented on.  And she arranges for the whole thing to be recorded and streamed on live TV and the internet.  The military officers and scientists are court-martialled and the AP's are moved to much better quarters where they can at least have some freedoms.  And their humanitarian rights are debated for several years during which no actions can actually be taken against them.  It'snot a normal human existence as they are still unintentionally dangerous, but it is a step in the right direction.

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InsaneMonkey46 [2017-07-08 04:07:59 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow! Hearing the reveal, I can really see how it fits in with the guess who! The fact the graying and crumbling was actually in a literal sense is interesting, but heartbreaking that she can't turn off the power.
I love how much detail you've put into the power shes gain, detailing it like a scientist would. And the event that caused the problem is rather curious too. Who and how did this event occur? What was the alternate dimension they tapped into?
I can't wait to see more of Aesha, and see what happens in her story~

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Raqonteur In reply to InsaneMonkey46 [2017-07-20 10:30:55 +0000 UTC]

Heh, what looked metaphorical was actually real.  Mwhahah, I'm evil like that sometimes

Yes, the whole thing is a curse to her, which is sort of the point of the story and characters.  It was triggered by my son saying how cool it would be to be bitten by a radioactive spider and get superpowers.  I grew up reading X-Men related comics in the 80's when mutants were feared and hated for their powers.  I wanted to write something where so called superpowers weren't a wonderful gift but something that carried a heavy toll.

The Event was a scientific experiment conducted within the university grounds that accidentally breached the walls between realities.  Because of the way that one of the students was affected, it's possible that fragmented evidence of the event was thrown back in time and space and research into those fragments actually caused The Event in the first place... so in this case cause actually followed effect.  Mindbending, eh.
As to that other reality.  Well.  Imagine a place where the rules of time, space and everything we think we know about the universe are completely different.  Put simply, we can't.  Our minds and perceptions aren't big enough.  That's why each of those affected experienced it in a different way and was altered by that perception.  It's also why each of the alterations fits the personality of the affected person.  It's a warped version of their own personal reality.
Aesha is an artist, so she experienced a place of mindbending colours and shapes.
Jemma was the quiet one who didn't want to a bother, she experienced a clutter of personalities and voices and faded away into nothing.
Dianne is an overachiever.  Driven.  She experienced a single road leading to the so called 'vanishing point'.  Where everything sensation around her was a blur.  She became a living dynamo, creating electrical energy with every tiny movement.
Stephanie was a track star, always moving, always wanting to be somewhere else.  She experienced everywhere at once, all piled on top of one another.  Like living in the vanishing point.  Now when she moves location, she creates permanent portals at random intervals.
Lizzy was a girl who liked her food a little too much.  She experienced a world of nothing but tastes through every sense.  But her weight inverted, now she increases in mass and density algorithmically, 1, 2, 4, 8, 64, 256, 65536, etc. unless she eats every two hours or so.  Theoretically, she could become a singularity (black hole) if she fasted long enough... or died...

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Meghan-Dzurichko [2017-07-06 15:16:57 +0000 UTC]

I like the sad face best. I am curious to know what were the powers of her 2 friends who escaped with her?

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Raqonteur In reply to Meghan-Dzurichko [2017-07-18 00:05:15 +0000 UTC]

I like that one too, especially the tear tracks.

There were five friends originally.
Jemma (Ghost) became intangible and died of starvation because she couldn't touch food
Stephanie (Stepper) is kept permanently sedated because when her body moves location she randomly creates permanent portals through quantum entanglement.  (there is a portal to Siberia - 3km outside a Russian military base- in the former university gym, and another to Mt. Fiji in the gardens).  What happens if one opens into the ocean or worse, the vacuum of space.  They can't be closed.  Ever.  And the pressures on both sides would always attempt to equalise.

The three that escaped are;
Aesha (Pallete) eats colour/energy as you know.
Dianne (Dynamo) generates raw electricity with every body movement, no matter how small.  Which in turn creates static and magnetic secondary effects around her.  None of which she can stop or in any way control.
Lizzy (Feeder) has inverted mass gain.  Unless she eats every two hours or so, her body gains mass and density algorithmically (ie. 1,2,4, 16, 256, 65536, etc).  Theoretically, she could gain enough mass to become a singularity (black hole).  What happens when she dies and can't eat anymore...

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Meghan-Dzurichko In reply to Raqonteur [2017-07-19 16:28:08 +0000 UTC]

That's sad. I am interested to see how the story pans out.

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Raqonteur In reply to Meghan-Dzurichko [2017-08-30 10:02:16 +0000 UTC]

If you scroll further up the comments, there's a synopsis of how it all turns out

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Celesol [2017-07-05 01:59:49 +0000 UTC]

Love the scared face - it just has so much character and emotion in it!

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Raqonteur In reply to Celesol [2017-07-17 23:50:03 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much

It's the colouring subtleties I'm particularly proud of in these.  The way she is much paler in the scared picture for instance, by washing out some of the facial colour with a blending marker.

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Certain-Oddities [2017-07-04 23:26:26 +0000 UTC]

Wow you put a lot of thought into the anatomy on this! That's so cool! I'm a sucker for detail like that

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Raqonteur In reply to Certain-Oddities [2017-07-17 23:45:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.
I'm a writer first, so storytelling is natural to me.  And I want everything to make sense.
Plus I'm a sucker for details too   I can't let an idea go until I've followed it through to every conclusion possible, or impossible

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mintysoup [2017-07-02 23:35:17 +0000 UTC]

I love how this is set up like a medical chart or research document! What a unique and creative idea  

I find her mutation to take the color out of things interesting; instead of eating regularly, she gains nutrients from the colours. c: 

I'm curious as to why the male survivors died, but the female ones survived with "powers". Is it some sort of defect with the Y chromosome or something like that? 

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Raqonteur In reply to mintysoup [2017-07-17 23:43:26 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, I had a lot of fun writing it, and the accompanying scientific report.  And figuring out how to draw an X-ray slide traditionally was interesting

Yes, each of the survivors has a very unique ability, and none of them are particularly nice.
She's a sort of energy hoover, the colour thing is just a visual byproduct of the drain, really.  But it's much more fun and visually alluring to show that she 'eats colour'

I never really dwelled on the exact science of that, the reality that they intersected with is governed by completely different rules.  I'm not sure that there can be a scientific explanation that works in our reality's frame of reference.  And not all of the male victims died.  There were at least three initial male survivors.  It's just what happened to the girls happened even more so to the boys.  And in the majority of cases, it proved fatal.  On a whole new scale of fatal.

Since I'm probably never actually going to write the whole story, I can tell you what happened to a couple of them:
Peter, a fellow student, became a living breach between the realities.  A place where things from either side were drawn through to the other.  While his mind was stretched between both, and throughout space in time in both.  Also, consider that the deleterious effects of that other reality on our were mirrored on that side.  The presence of things from our universe was just as destructive to theirs as theirs is to ours.  The girls were forced to destroy Peter on a molecular level to close the breach.  And no-one has any idea where or when or what possibly happened to the body, and/or the mind during/after that.
It's altogether possible that fragments of the event scattered backwards through time via Peter's breach and led to the experiments that caused this in the first place.  Meaning Cause followed Effect...

Mr. Michaelson was one of the tutors.  A favourite among the girls, always ready to help a student and charismatic in his own nerdy way.  He loved teaching and inspiring and giving out knowledge.  What he became was a mirror reflection of that, and in some ways of Aesha too.  He became a thing that ate minds, sucked the very knowledge out of your head constantly and aggressively until there was nothing left and the physical surface of the brain was completely smooth.  He became a predator that craved minds to feed on, only able to grasp at fragments of lucidity and his former personality when devouring minds, or for moments after having absolutely cleansed a mind.  He was barring the way out of the ruins of the explosion that caused all this, almost like a boss mob in some game.  The girls had to get past him to get out to relative safety.  That's why there are holes in their memories, and why some of them had to relearn even certain simple gross motor actions.
  

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pheeph [2017-07-01 20:55:20 +0000 UTC]

Man, that's horrible for Aesha... So an experimental accident that led to a major rift in time and space mutated a number of people including Aesha?  What's worse, her 'ability' can suck up the color anything living or non living... does it happen in a certain radius?

When I looked at her alternating eye color, I thought she had a severe case of heterochromia... but this is the result of the accident...

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Raqonteur In reply to pheeph [2017-07-02 09:05:26 +0000 UTC]

That's right.  There were 317 original survivors but around half were killed by their own 'abilities'.

Consider Aesha's ability like radiation, it radiates out from her at a generally low level, sort of like background radiation.  Or maybe like a vacuum cleaner, as long as there is colour/energy to be had, the range is minimal, a few feet.  As she drains the surroundings the radius spreads to keep up the feed. 
But occasionally, unpredictably, it will spike.  Reducing everything and everyone within ten feet or so to dust, and severely draining everything for a further five or ten feet.

But did I mention that all the AP's have a resistance to each other's 'abilities'.  It wouldn't save them in the case of a spike, but in general terms it would slow down the drain and negative consequences.

Everyone experienced The Event differently.  For Aesha, it was colours (more on this in a later task).  But yes, her colour changing eyes are a side effect of what happened to her. 
And I'm impressed you knew the term for it, I wouldn't have known it outright though I have come across it before.

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ProbablyImpossible [2017-07-01 20:23:34 +0000 UTC]

That's a really interesting concept! But it must be terrible for her. :/ Reminds me a bit of Rogue from X-Men.

The scientists are clearly jerks, but I hope somebody finds a way to help her control her alteration, at least.

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Raqonteur In reply to ProbablyImpossible [2017-07-02 08:53:19 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, and yes it is pretty terrible for her.
But in some ways, she got off lightly.
Of her close friends;
DIANNE (Dynamo) generates electricity with every bodily movement, however small.  She can't touch anyone without fear of electrocuting them or go near metal surfaces.  Or bodies of water.  Oh, and she can't use any electronics or even watch TV due to interference.
JEMMA (Ghost) phased through physical objects until she couldn't become solid anymore and died of starvation because she couldn't eat or drink
LIZZI (Feeder) has inverted mass again, and unless she eats hourly or so, gains atomic mass/density at an algorithmic rate.  Theoretically, she could gain enough mass to become a singularity (black hole).  So what happens if she dies...
STEPHANIE (Stepper) randomly creates portals through quantum entanglement when she moves (or is moved).  These are permanent.  What happens if one end opens up into the ocean or even space?  She is kept permanently sedated and in lockdown for safety.

Yes, they pretty much are Jerks.  But they have to consider the safety of the masses first.  Do you really want people like that wandering around your town?

If you read the attached (linked ) scientific report, you'll remember that these Alterations originate in another dimension with different physical laws to ours.  There is zero chance of controlling something that doesn't follow our physical laws   But that's also a point of the story, superpowers aren't always cool.

As for the X-Men angle, I guess there are some similarities to Rogue.  I did like that the Marvel Mutants weren't always in control of their powers and also suffered bias and abuse.  It made that world more real/believable.  As a fan of X-Men and more specifically the New Mutants (Teenage X-Men in training ) I did create a character in that mould once...

In her stories (linked on her page), she mutated from a normal girl into a pool of slime and was taught by Professor X to take human form again before joining the New Mutants for a short time.  But she wasn't cut out to be a superhero and left the school.

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girl-n-herhorse [2017-07-01 20:11:19 +0000 UTC]

Oh my goodness! What a horrible thing to happen to her! Very interesting backstory, and I really like how you did her expression and showing us how her eyes change, all as if it were done by a researcher. Very creative!

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Raqonteur In reply to girl-n-herhorse [2017-07-02 03:26:43 +0000 UTC]

Yes, it was shocking, wasn't it.

Thank you.  The whole pice was designed as if a research paper.  As was the accompanying (linked) document.  Did you manage to get through that too?

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girl-n-herhorse In reply to Raqonteur [2017-07-02 03:41:01 +0000 UTC]

I did (just now ) You've really put a lot of thought and detail into the whole thing. It's really impressive

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Raqonteur In reply to girl-n-herhorse [2017-07-17 21:43:59 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much

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