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remembermywords — Satisfaction, Only Not.
Published: 2007-05-18 00:27:41 +0000 UTC; Views: 133; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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I'm just a girlwho knows how to live
I'm just a kid
who knows what it's like
I'm just a teen
that wants to be understood
I'm just a rebel
that wreaks havoc
I'm just a badass
that seeks adventure
I'm just a daughter
that takes on challenges
I'm just a dreamer
that has high hopes
I'm just a philosopher
that holds the truth
I'm just a girl
who knows who she is
I'm just a girl
who wants to be heard
I'm just a girl
who needs the chance
to be more than
Just a girl.
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the only part i felt didnt fit was:
I'm just a girl
who is satisfied
with everything there is
it seems the rest of the poem wasnt leadin towards satisfaction, seems it should be dissatisfied ?
just my opinion but it didnt seem to fit for me.
good poem overall, nice repetition and valid points.
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hmm im gonna have to think about this one
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maybe dissatisfaction doesn't quite fit either.. look at words like discontent etc.. your choice, jus found the rebel and satisfaction didnt go together.. if satisfied nothing to rebel against?
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i know what you mean.. ill keep brainstorming
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what do we think now? lol
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nice change, the end now suits the poem and creates a more powerful message, good work
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lol thanks. im glad you said something because i wasnt much of a fan of the ending either lol
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well i think the ending now is perfect, i know with myself sometimes something doesn't quite fit and i can't think of how to make it so a little input can help with ideas so always glad to help
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That's a valid point and I'm glad someone made it. Because it only takes one to start a change.
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