bloatedcow [2005-10-10 03:11:38 +0000 UTC]

Catch me and make a wish..... As a falling star? Picked too early.... sometimes couples pick a star to be "theirs" or whatever..... it fell, and the light is for whoever wants it. So few would ever care about it and just take it for granted instead. It is the weak shallowness of so many that believe they are owed, and look for so many escapes. That five second orgasm or the joint after work.


Nice piece

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bladerain [2005-07-22 17:33:15 +0000 UTC]

This is a great piece. Something about is eye (ear) catching... especially the make a wish... The "Photo" part is great... Puzzling enough without becoming confusing, which is a hard balance to reach sometimes.

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soulwrai [2005-05-03 20:04:17 +0000 UTC]

great piece, you can sense a sort of confusion in the piece which adds nicely to the atmosphere you create writing this. well written poet.

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heinouslakroga [2005-05-02 03:30:56 +0000 UTC]

very good, i like it a lot. especially the lines. "I was picked far too early, I've been falling ever since." i don't know why but i just like those lines. good work, like a fox.

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