ReverseIncision [2005-01-01 05:31:22 +0000 UTC]

ha, i dont exactly know what prose is...and i call it poetry, so its poetry, lol.

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Spectate [2005-01-01 04:41:36 +0000 UTC]

Now would we call this prose or poetry? hmmm...

i can relate to this, though... describes who i was about 2-3 years ago.. I was reminded last week when had a short bout of depression.. Almost thought I was going to start hearing those voices again..

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AngelAsylum [2004-12-31 18:19:15 +0000 UTC]

Nice work!

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TwilightsFall [2004-12-31 15:46:54 +0000 UTC]

After each comma, you could move to the next line as follows:

"The black hole of existance in me,
spreads itself throughout my body,
As anger covers me like a
Cloud that seems to downpour,
But there's no one else but me."

Everyone watches, but no one cares,
Shadowed faces, darkened people,
Depressed and walking beside their fears.

Dreams don't exist, only nightmares,
For people who find time to sleep in this hell,
Without worry getting in the way.

People laugh at what they can't see,
At which they don't know.
They think only with their lips,
And the knowledge that exits through them.

I can't find my way out of this maze of darkness,
Everyone collapses down underground,
Resting in peace, yet resting with one eye open,
Hiding from these fears they've created, themselves,
We disagree that they do this,
But it's only because we can't see.

^^^^^^^^^^^

Something kinda like this...

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