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Page 1: You Are HerePage 2: [link]
Page 3: [link]
The Storyteller: [link]
The Counterpart: [link]
The Outcast: [link]
The Officer: [link]
EDIT: I fixed up these old audition pages a little - got rid of that hideous all-black background. I'm going to work on neatening up a few things so stuff looks a little better, since I plan on making this a complete project.
Page one! As I've mentioned in my journal, I'm auditioning for the Artists at the Ready: New Canvas OCT. It's been both fun and hectic trying to get it all done. My audition script is very long, but since I managed to finish this first section (out of 3), I thought I'd go ahead and post it so you guys can tell me if I'm doing good so far. Hope you enjoy. ^^
For those that don't know what's going on: in this OCT, I the artist am supposed to physically 'be there' in the dimension where the OCT is taking place. So, yeah. That's me.
I got a new haircut a few months ago! 
Anyhoo, you're supposed to get some kind of invitation/summons and then show up whether you want to or not. That should be enough context.Commentary:
Panel 1: This is partially based on real life, because I DID go to a coffee shop recently to play on my laptop. Gotta love the relaxed atmosphere and free WiFi in coffe shops, even if I do hate coffee.
Panel 2: As noted above, I hate coffee. So that would be a cup of hot chocolate. I will drink hot chocolate in any weather, because it is delicious and not coffee. Starbucks hot chocolate actually tastes really not excellent, though, so I only get it out of necessity (i.e. I want hot chocolate and it's the only kind there).
Panel 3: Clearly, the person in charge of writing my invitation/notice is both very polite and a gameshow host.
Panel 4: That counter curves really weirdly and I dislike it very much, but doggonit, it is a background!
Panel 5: Seriously, would YOU take an email like that seriously? If you would, there is a chance that you have been on the internet far too long, comrade.
A shoutout to my good friend , whom I believe was the first person I mentioned my interest in entering this thing to. ^^
...Oh darnit, I forgot my chair! Will fix this later. >.<
Panel 6-9: I enjoy the challenge of walking while reading and have done it for years, and I've never run into people. Good peripheral vision is a wonderful thing, as I will truly come to appreciate in the next panel. Also, you get 10,000 Awesomeness Points if you actually recognize the book I'm reading and the reference.
Panel 10: If the landscape seems at all boring to you considing the fact that I'm now in The Real, please cut me some slack, because no matter HOW crazy and fantastical something might look up close, you aren't going to be seeing much of the detail from THAT HIGH UP.
I tried coloring this panel, but it would have taken too long to make it look nice, so here is a helpful reference guide to understanding this picture: the clouds are the misshapen blobs with wiggly lines in them, the trees/forest are the smaller misshapen blobs all crammed together, and the body of water is the only misshapen blob with an island volcano in the middle. And that weird squiggly thing in the upper corner is a canyon. There you go.Panel 11: I'm sure I'll realize at some point that at least if I had obliviously walked off the edge of my curiously solid cloud, I PROBABLY would have landed on one of the many other curiously solid clouds between me and the ground. Or maybe the dragon would catch me, but that would inspire a whole new level of shock, I'm sure.
Hee. Flying beanie hat.
Panel 12: I'm going to be extremely upset about dropping that book when I quit freaking out. That was a good book. But on the plus side, I never have to draw it ever again!
And that is indeed supposed to be one of Fox's bird plushies. It'll probably show up closer later.
So here I am, in The Real, with a laptop and my purse and NO FREAKING CLUE what's going on and much too upset/confused to appreciate what I'm sure it a really gorgeous airial view of the country. I didn't actually originally plan to take so much stuff with me, but then I set myself in a coffee shop and you don't just LEAVE your laptop at a coffee shop (on purpose), sooo yeah. I seem to be very effectively equipped for this adventure.
Hopefully my laptop battery was fully charged, eh? At least apparantly it was a warm enough day for me to not need my jacket, which I also considered since I usually just tie it around my waist and which I'm sure neither I nor any artists who end up drawing me would really care for. I was really pleased with how fast I got this one done, but there's a lot left to do. Thankfully, though, I think this will suffice as an audition if I somehow don't manage to finish the rest. Let me know what you guys think! ^^ Reference sheets will hopefully be up next week.
Drawn with 0.5 mechanical pencil and inked with .005, .01, .03, and .05 Micron pens. Pasted together and tidied up on Paint.net.
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North! Or Be Eaten! copyright Andrew Peterson
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Yes, I handle stress so eloquently. ^^
Whoo-hoo! XD It WAS pretty nice to see all these lovely comments! Thank you~
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Was that a beanie cap I saw flying away!? D8 Wow that's crazy so far!
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Yes. Yes it was. ^^ And thank you! It will likely get crazier.
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That's just awesome
You're welcome!
I have to say I love crazy stuff
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Well we ARE in The Real; it seemed boring to not have SOMETHING more exciting than just a dragon and strangely solid clouds in the opening scene! XD
I do, too!
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I know right? XD
I almost have background things going on through half of my audition. I have little self control when it comes to being silly
YES YES!
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I. LOVE. Your expression in the last panel. XDDD Man that made my day and the perspective of lookingdown at the ground, you just totally nailed it there. I wouldn't be that brave enough to do a perstive point like that to be honest with you. You got another page coming up? ='D
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You mean you didn't read the copious comments in the text box wherein the possibility of a second page was briefly mentioned? ;D Nah, I kid. Yes, two more pages are coming, one of which is in the process of being digitally assembled! Stay tuned, and thanks for the comments!
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You're not alone on the whole theory of prespective drawing either. I can draw backgrounds for beans, but that is an excellect trick you did, using the clouds to cover up most of the area.
Heh heh well, I can't wait to see the next page and you're very welcome~
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Yup. :I Backgrounds be trouble sometimes. But if you're determiend enough, you can do some cool stuff. ^^ I've been learning that with this comic! (And yes, tricks do help. 
Next page will definitely be up next week! And, if all goes well, so will ref sheets!
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Saw it. XD Creepy laptops are just fun to converse with though!
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Oh yes, I love the Wingfeather Saga. When you started talking about Janner, I thought, Could it be? Then you said "Fork Factory" and I knew it was none other than an Andrew Peterson original. (I will admit I couldn't have told you the title right off the bat, but hey. I'm still pretty awesome.)
I like how you're going with this. I keep thinking that I should do AatR next year--I feel a little left out.
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8D YES! Another Wingfeather fan! I am delighted to hear this. ^^ I can't wait to read the third one; it's FINALLY out on sale, but I'm being patient because I currently have an internship at a publishing company and thus already have more books than I know what to do with. XD (And yes! Yes you are. *awards Awesomeness Points, including a bonus cookie because you figured it out WITHOUT even reading the title*)
That would be cool if they did it again next year. I dunno if it'll end up being a yearly thing, but that would be exciting. ^^ Thanks, I'm glad you like the direction! Hopefully it'll keep going in a good way over the next few pages. I should have Page 2 up real soon.
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They don't have The Monster In The Hollow at my library yet.
I can't seem to find anything about how often AatR takes place, except for a little snippet about making this year's contest better than last year's. I do so hope they do it next year.
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Bummer! I'm okay with waiting for it for now just because I'm doing an internship at a publishing company where you can take all the free books you want off of their Overflow Shelf, so I have more than enough to read right now. XD I'm currently reading the Auralia Thread series by Jeffrey Overstreet. It's AWESOEM, you shoule read it!
If nothing else, you can always draw spectator or fan entries!
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Overflow Shelf . . . sounds like a bibliophile's heaven.
I had never heard about that before. I might just give that a go!
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XD It kind of is. I left the internship last week with three boxes full of books I'd collected over the 10 weeks I was there.
I finally finished the Auralia's Colors series. The ending was a little odd, but I think maybe it is just one of those endings that I will need to read again to appreciate better. I would have liked it a little better if they had more solidly tied up a few particular loose ends, but overall I enjoyed the series.
Go for it!
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Yeah, little loose ends are what always get me about series endings, too.
*spectatifies* Where do I even begin? 
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"As noted above, I hate coffee. So that would be a cup of hot chocolate"
That's pretty much the only reason I go to Costa. Sadly I never get to use their free WiFi, because whenever I go to Costa I'm usually never in a situation to sit around for long or if I am, bringing the laptop with me wasn't appropriate to begin with.
I'm really picky about my hot chocolate, it has to have cream on it, and it has to be in a takeaway cup. Always
But I dye cress...
Hope you get through! I'm interested to see what characters you chose. ^^
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Hooray, another non-coffee drinker!
I didn't know they even put them in anything besides takeaway cups. XD Maybe we're just not giving certain perks at the coffee shops I frequent.
You mean 'digress', or was that a pun? *amused/confused*
Thanks! Hopefully I'll have at least a few ref sheets and the next page of the entry up in a few days. ^^ I'm having trouble with my third char's ref sheet, he's proving ODDLY stubborn to be drawn...
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XD I like the smell, and I've tried it a couple of times but nah. The only coffee I like is coffee chocolates.
Oooooh! That's sweet. Nice guy! XD Eve (My laptop) is getting finicky with the e and space buttons. I was looking around at some laptops the other day and found this GORGEOUS gaming laptop (It glowed red!) Sadly it was £999 and when you consider I'm gonna have a hard time finding the money for a regular priced laptop that one was just a tad out of my range
Lol, well over here you can have them in a proper cup or glass if you're drinking in, but that's more expensive.
It was a pun XD A joke I carried with me from an old comedy show that used to talk about what had been happening over the past week. If the narrator waffled a bit too much he used to say "But I digress" And a picture of a hand holding a bottle of dye over some watercress was shown. It's a shame I can't remember what that program was called.
Whee! It's always the way.
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Yeah, coffee is kinda yucky. I think I finally figured out that I don't like it because I can't stand bitter stuff. This may also be why I can't understand why anyone would like alcohol, 'cause the few drops I've tasted were TERRIBLE.
Yeah, my bros can be pretty cool. ^^ Heheh, yeah, prices are not very helpful in the search for a new laptop, so I'm even more grateful to my bro. I hope Eve is no longer holding a grudge over you eyeing other laptops!
XD That's funny! Oh, and I finished my entry! Took me FOREVER, but it's up! Now to see if I'm in the half of the entrants that actually gets in...
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That would make sense. I don't mind the odd bit of alcohol on special occasions, though when I asked Mum to get some Vodka in for Christmas so I could have some vodka and coke, and she wouldn't let me pour it out myself. I think she was worried I was going to get plastered. But let's face it, I'm 27 and I've never got more than a little merry. I think I can be trusted by now XD
Ya!
Oh she got worse ¬¬ The keyboard's gone stupid. I had to remove the E key in order to get it to work and even then it ranges from having to be pressed really hard to get a single E to producing a string of Es without even being touched (Which is very irritating when you're trying to work in Paint Tool SAI and it won't let you change the tool from an eraser), then I couldn't get a capital D unless I pressed really hard (Which was then followed by a string of Es) and I couldn't get a capital C at all! Thankfully Mum came to the rescue and bought me a nice little USB keyboard. My first time using it today. It's lovely to use.
Whee! Good luck! I need to got clear out my watch inbox so I can see it.
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XD Yeah, probably. Can't blame her for being a LITTLE worried with soemthing as strong as Vodka, though!
Dang. You REALLY need a new computer, don't you?
Sadly I didn't get in, but I'm hoping I might be able to do a little side project, at least. We shall see! It would be cool to make myself get some comic practice in. It's SO frustrating sometimes, I feel like I can't get the dialogue to flow right now. >.<
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True. I just wish she'd trust me a little more with that sort of thing XD Mind you, I think she did take the hint by New Years XD
Shhhhhhhh, she might hear you!
Ah! Is that side project the one you're doing now while stuck in the Real?
Heck, I know that feeling. Felis Felidae suffers from that... well... that and the art failure XD
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Eh, you know moms. It's their job to worry.
XD
Ironically, just last night I started up on this side project again, which yes, is indeed that SE storyline for AATR. XD I'm hoping to actually do something with it.
Hey, whatever DID happen to Felis Felidae?
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Tis true, and lol, I'd forgotten about these.
W00t
Lol, it's still kicking around. I got a few pages of thumbnails and a half of rough drafts. Eventually I'll get back into it. Still playing around with ideas.
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Lol, that's kind of what happened to my Spoon of Doom comic. I still love the characters and use them in stuff, and the concept is still floating around, but as for actual plot and script? Nnnot so much.
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It's always easier to play with the ideas in your head than it is to write/draw them isn't it? XD
Felix: I keep poking her occasionally, but that usually leads to a certain draconian halfbreed getting very jealous
Shadow: Shut up! It's not like I stop her from thinking about you!
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XD Yes. Yes, it really is.
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XD I dunno, it's THE REAL; it seemed like it shoudl have some random stuff in it! I may have been going too Random Insanity Universe on it, though; I'll have to be careful of that.
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Works for me. After all, who am I to question the Real? XD
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Haha xD I enjoyed that.
I've never actually been to Starbucks myself... But I also hate coffee
I'm just a plain old tea addict.
Congratulations! You noticed you walked into the Real BEFORE walking into a scary object of doom!
(Or in this case... Off a cloud and falling to your doom.)
Love the dragon by the way. Looks aaaaaaawesoooooome~
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Hurrah! ^^ Thanks, glad you did!
Yeah, I'm a hot chocolate addict myself. Starbucks hot chocolate is not that great (blech, gourmet XP), but there's a coffee shop back home that serves flavored hot chocolates. Plus I just like to buy things, and it's the only beverage there I can stand. XD
I know, right? I'm sure I'll appreciate this eventually, when I'm not having a heart attack. ^^
*glee* Thanks! Glad it came out well!
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YESSSSSS yes yes yes. I hope you get in, because this will be spectacular.
Also, do you really have that bag? It's pretty cool. I love the attention to detail you give your backgrounds.
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YAY! 
I do! I got it for a buck at Trader's World (giant flea market back home), and it's blue (my favorite color!) and the PERFECT size! The front flap actually has mesh across the front (thus the zipper, if you look closely), but I was NOT going to torture myself drawing that so small. Thanks, I'm really glad the backgrounds are coming out well. I'm trying to stretch myself.
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Who is this strange new person and why are they talking to me????
Oh wait that's Riverfox. And she has a new icon.
And I drew it!
Neato!
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I gotta say, I already love this icon more than the old one. Not that I don't still love Flem to bits, but I've wanted a colored icon for forever. And RzR has informed me that she looks like she's eating cookies, which seems to fit. XD So thanks again for drawing such a great picture of her, 'cause now I have an awesome new icon!
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I KNOW, right? 
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Man, who knows when you're going to see a bookshop again!
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Exactly! And who knows what kind of internet connection they have in The Real? I could be without reading material for days.
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No kidding, you may have to settle for road trip songs.
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And RFWGirl will be the only one who'll sing them with me. (Barrenger wouldn't be caught dead singing road trip songs. I won't be suprrised if he spends a good part of our first adventure sulking.) What WOULD be a good road trip song in The Real, I wonder?
"Fox and friends they had a realm! E-I-E-I-O!
And in that realm they sucked some artists! E-I-E-I-O!
With a screaming here and a falling there!
Weird lands, doom cats, people losing sanity!
Fox and friends, they had a realm! E-I-E-I-O!"
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There has only been one time that I was in danger while walking and reading, and I even missed that. Heading to work, I walked past this truck with a beam sticking out the back. I saw it just in time to swerve my head away, but someone saw me and laughed.
However, all this walking and reading does indeed give great peripheral vision, and excellent reflexes!
Haha... oh dear. I see something else we could be doing for your request!
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XD One time I was reading while I crossed the street to my workplace, and I KNOW I wasn't in any huge danger, but all my coworkers inside started babbling about how a car almost hit me! And I think I've almsot run into a few objects in the hall at the college, but indeed, it is wonderful to have perophereal vision!
Now THAT could be interesting.
So what did you think of the page? Is it a good start? I'd love your honest opinion, you being a fellow auditioner and all.
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Haha, other people's reactions are definitely the best part!
I think I run into more stuff when I'm NOT reading than when I am!
Hmmm... I love the expressions, but I did notice that when you get up from your table, the car seems to fit like headphones. Your background is fantastic by the way! And the flying beanie is funny, if not strange. I also noticed the scream seems a little forced. It might just be that your expression doesn't match it. A little more horror/terror in that panel could probably help there. Maybe the mouth wider, or the body language a little more tense. Here's a good recoil reaction in this audition. [link]
Shame you lost your book!
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PFFF! XD And yes, people's reactions ARE the best part. I used to do silly stuff just to get looks, like wearing a comb-through-the-head thingie to school. It was hilarious.
Glad the expressions came out well. Yeah, wondered if the car would be weird, but oh well.
With those final panels, I wasn't actually going for horror/terror so much as absolute shock/confusion/fear. You know how when you're REALLY surprised by something, your jaw goes slack and you in general become sort of limp? That's more what I was going for (and why I dropped my book *sob*). The scream came after the super-long ellipses to sort of signal me rising out of shock and into ACTUAL terror.
Hopefully that explains it. If not, and I still failed, darnit. But at least I still like the facial expression on second-to-last panel. ^^ This is meant to stretch me, so I shall keep these things in mind!
I know! It's terrible! It was such a good book, and I paid possibly three whole bucks for it! In-comic me will be really sad when she stops being so concerned about not falling to her death.
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