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He said, “I bet ifI ate fireflies,
I'd light up something
wonderful and special
and then I'd be the perfect
man you'd always want.”
She grimaced, said to
stop reading Alice in
Wonderland, to stop
being such a dreamer,
stop talking in abstract
ideas and nonsensical prose.
It's. Not. Healthy.
---
He hand wrote a little
chapbook for her, poems
and thoughts, his deepest.
Pricked his finger,watching in
fascination as the sanguine
liquid dripped, splatter small
in the corner of the cover page.
She would always have a piece
of his heart near-by.
He found it abused and dogeared
through use of neglect in corners
of forgotten grooves in bookcases.
“Your poetry is tired and abusive
to the English language,
name dropping doesn't make you
any weightier and let the piece
breathe just once, for goodness sakes.
Stop using so many friggin commas.
Periods can be your friend too,”
she said. He propped his head up
on his bent arm, cheek mussing out of
shape. “Really now?” he said. “Why
don't you tell me how you really feel?”
---
She turned to him and said,
“We never do anything fun anymore.”
He said, “We just did it last
night,” but she gave the screwball
look and repeated that line again.
She said, “I'm tired of wiping my
tears with this old handkerchief
you gave me on our third anniversary.”
He said, “I'm tired of playing this violin
I brought for myself on our first.”
The resolution was to continue
that continual agreement of disagreements
when their eyes opened to the rays
of the sun and the ridge in between
eyebrows that develops every time
they frown; The word Completion
never was learnt by the disaster kids
and they drifted off to solitary dreams
pondering how it lasted so long at all.
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Comments: 19
bohemianpoets [2009-07-30 00:26:24 +0000 UTC]
He said, “I bet if
I ate fireflies,
I'd light up something
wonderful and special
and then I'd be the perfect
man you'd always want.” -- goosebumps. this gave me goosebumps
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myheartsong [2008-12-19 18:40:26 +0000 UTC]
This is ...intriguing... It's like watching a couple, critiquing their problems, when I know my own are similar. ...at least that's how it seemed to me. This is so good...it's so true to life!
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ScribbledNotes In reply to myheartsong [2008-12-20 20:45:13 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! I'm glad it's very relatable. That was the goal, ya know!
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VintageStar [2008-11-28 08:06:33 +0000 UTC]
i know i read this and i meant to comment but im pretty sure something came up, but now i have the time and i want to tell you that even though i have too felt this way, i definatly wouldnt have wrriten something this in depth as you have. cudos to you <3
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VintageStar In reply to ScribbledNotes [2008-11-30 02:29:31 +0000 UTC]
no problem ill be reading more soon
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missmocha [2008-11-24 05:08:08 +0000 UTC]
I don't like her.
He sounds like me.
My favorite part: "It's.Not.Healthy" love the use of periods.
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ScribbledNotes In reply to missmocha [2008-11-27 19:20:46 +0000 UTC]
I love that part too. Really felt something when I wrote that.
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shesamelonhead [2008-11-20 18:34:15 +0000 UTC]
this one is great, sad but great. you have such a way at describing things, i am in awe
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ScribbledNotes In reply to shesamelonhead [2008-11-22 21:02:05 +0000 UTC]
Aw, thank you! Yeah, it was suppose to be a bit of a sad one, rough.
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anyimacielgray [2008-11-20 00:56:58 +0000 UTC]
your poetry tastes like rain.
(it is healthy, by the way. poetry is the best thing for you.)
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ScribbledNotes In reply to anyimacielgray [2008-11-20 00:58:10 +0000 UTC]
Rain is my favorite thing in the world. That's truly one of the best compliments.
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anyimacielgray In reply to ScribbledNotes [2008-11-20 01:00:59 +0000 UTC]
i love rain too [:
you deserved it.
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