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We sat leaning backs to each other, staring out intothe night sky on moist grass, warm air.
"Why is it so hard to say, 'I love you',
to someone for the first time, and so
hard to mean it a year later?" I asked.
We hugged our knees and let
the wind's breeze kiss our faces.
"Because, we're human, maybe," she said.
"Because, our voice box has a hard time
getting the right frequencies together to make
that wonderful sound to someone the first go around."
I fiddled with my glasses.
"Because, maybe, our heart's wandered around
the globe without us, finding new loves,
new distractions, new fancies, and it stopped
sending the memo to our voice box.
Our voice box never let go, but our heart's
did so long ago. Maybe, maybe,” she said.
I heard the sound of her tongue licking her
lips. "Yeah, maybe, maybe," I said.
"That sounds good, yeah."
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Because, maybe, our heart's wandered around
the globe without us, finding new loves,
new distractions, new fancies, and it stopped
sending the memo to our voice box.
Our voice box never let go, but our heart's
did so long ago.
I love that too much.
Beautiful jobb~
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Okay. Seriously. I'm only asking this because I read a comment about your age. Just how old/young are you, hm?
Anyway, I really like this, which suprised me a bit. I find it creative and well thought out, for one, but just reading this snip-it of a conversation is interesting and, I think, nicely written. Although:
'I love you',
The comma should go before the apostrophe. (For American English, so I've learned :D)
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In that instant, I'm not sure it does, since it was a quote inside a line of spoken text, you know? It's like me saying something right now, it's just a quote inside a quote... does that even make sense? lol
And thank you! I'm 27. Is that a good or bad thing?
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Lol, yes. The way I've learned it is this: "Blah blah 'blah,' blah." (That's an amazing example 
Ha, it's a good thing I suppose... considering I thought you might be older O.o
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Oh GOD no, not older.
But in that example, that actually looks pretty right. maybe that's the right way. Hmm...
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I can see if it's in any of my English books, possibly, if you're still curious about it :] I just remember my English 100 and 101 instructor writing it up on the board all the time along with grammar and spelling corrections. (He was a massive nitpick x-x )
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Actually, after you said it, I do believe you are right about the puncuation problem. It's been so long, I forget all the proper rules, ya know.
And no, getting old really isn't that bad. It's just, one of those things that everything else around you puts in your head that it's just awful, but I still think I'm only 21 honestly.lol
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Totally understand! It's only been a year since I've had to write in MLA, for example, I now that I have to use it again... 
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this whole thing made me sad and hopeful at the same time. i can't describe why though. thank you, though.
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I'm glad I could be able to invoke so many emotions inside of you!
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ending's the best part, in my opinion.
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Maybe.
I really like the title! Your poetry always seems so sophisticated...makes me jealous
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Haha! I wish it was. My poetry is weird. One day, I'll write something, and think it's the best thing I've ever written and then I'll look back at it in a few days and think, What kind of mediocore crap is this?! I thought I would be a poet? Ha! I'll never hack it with this garbage!
Yeah... that's typically how my comical regression of poetry writing goes. Then I get it over it and I'm all better.
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Wow. Geez. Thanks for making my heart explode again. _._ I love your work. Keep it up!
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You're so welcome!
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Wow, I really like this one.
And I really love the full title.
It's so interesting.
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Ha! That's just the regular stuff that floats in my mind. I just actually stopped being lazy and wrote it down real quick.lol 
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I love this. It made me think and it was beautifully written.
"Because, our voice box has a hard time
getting the right frequencies together to make
that wonderful sound to someone the first go around." The story of my life.
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You and me both, sister. Life would have been TOTALLY different if I would have done so five years ago to someone ready to hear it.
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