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shadowsofthought — Under Which I Fall [NSFW]
Published: 2010-07-19 09:32:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 731; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 0
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Description I feel it pull at me
I can barely see
Where your leading me

Take good care
Don't spare
Me

I know you mean well
With each stroke that befells
Driven under my mind
And my body swells

I can feel
Your caring stroke
Against me

I know you care
I know your there

The pain signals
Pleasure under which I fall
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Comments: 6

AngelMitskano [2010-07-19 20:42:24 +0000 UTC]


Tis awsome!!!!

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ifyoucanmakeme [2010-07-19 15:22:08 +0000 UTC]

I like it, you should write poetry more often

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shadowsofthought In reply to ifyoucanmakeme [2010-07-19 15:29:05 +0000 UTC]

b-b-but are you saying i'm not a good story teller >.> lol actually i'm trying to even that out this is just the first time i've actually put down in words how submission or anything in the feild of BDSM makes me feel in a poem

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ifyoucanmakeme In reply to shadowsofthought [2010-07-19 15:31:31 +0000 UTC]

You are a good story teller But your poetry is good too

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shadowsofthought In reply to ifyoucanmakeme [2010-07-20 14:32:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I do plan on doing some poems from the perspective of Caleb, though I know that the character isn't very likable. But, if i made completely likable characters they'd be Gary Stu and Mary Sues abundant. I do appreciate you telling me something I don't see readily apparent; that I am good at writing in an all around fashion.

Bah, I rambled, anyway thank you!

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ifyoucanmakeme In reply to shadowsofthought [2010-07-20 15:10:14 +0000 UTC]

No problem "Perfect" characters are unrelatable and never make for a very good story.

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