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Published: 2009-05-11 20:01:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 42; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Description My mind wanders as i am stranded
Breaking down the reasons that i was branded
She couldn't stand it?
I gave her everything and she could handle it

Who was the one that was there for you when you fell
Who was the one that gave everything when your life hell
Who was the one who helped you stand
Who was the one that gave his heart from within

Break my heart
I feel a fool
Everything i gave to you
I was there from the start

You say this man never lies
You say you don't reall know why

You say I couldn't give you enough
When i went through ringer to give you love

Who was the one that stood there when you were silent
Who was the one who let you walk over him like he was blinded
Who never said you were a bitch or a cunt or a slut
Who was the one who gave it all up

I stood there strong for two years
Stood there through all the tears and all the fears
Let you do whatever when you were there
Didn't ask for a damn thing except for your love
Loyalty
Repsect

The all the sudden everythings different
Because i'm broken and don't know where i am

You say you need a strong man
There is no such thing within this land
Eventually we all break
And all i asked for
was love
was loyalty
was respect

I gave everything for you
May of not been metrial
but it was all for you

Now i have to learn to close the book
But i keep wanting that one last look
YOu had me twisted
And enlisted

Then you gave it all back
In one big sack
"here you aren't good enough
let me give you one last shove"

Now drowneded in dispair
I come to bear
On the things that weren't fair

I gave you everything
And now i feel like a hollow nothing
You broke me inside
I hope you still have your pride
Because karma won't let this shit slide

You say i lied?
I told you from the go when i told you
I had lied to myself for years
You were the one that made me see my unneeded fears

Even if you came back screaming
I wouldn't see you redeeming
Because you need to grow
And i need to show
The world the true me
and this is how i work through the pain
Because you left me with alot of fear
And i sit here
Drowning
But, I won't let you win
Because that was one spin
I needed to attend
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Comments: 4

Pickled-Poppy [2009-05-12 16:13:47 +0000 UTC]

Emo is not a bad thing. Nearly all poetry is Emo in it's own way.
I liked this it's emotive and effective.
Well done you.

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shadowsofthought In reply to Pickled-Poppy [2009-05-12 16:15:19 +0000 UTC]

thank you again

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shadowsofthought [2009-05-12 14:43:15 +0000 UTC]

it is not ill given I enjoy the praise and I thank you for it, it is a gift from the pain that helped me I'm still working through it all and i have a few poems that i am going to post that were written while i was with her so that people can see how my poems morphed over the time

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MephistozPet [2009-05-12 14:20:22 +0000 UTC]

It is very good, and I hope you not find the praise ill-given, it is not, I understand the "emo" ness of it, and it doesn't come off whiny at all, which is how I categorize emo. The rhyme scheme is very good. I can't really relate very well, but I think the frustration and hurt is universal in it, allowing everyone to relate one experience of theirs to it one way or another through the common pain. It is very good. Sorry to congradulate the outcome of your pain.

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