Bahama-dreams [2009-10-14 07:44:52 +0000 UTC]

I like it to here... It etches the image
To the backs of my lids
I'm not overly fond of using the same word in such a short piece (image). With the word burning in the previous stanza I think a word such as sears could take the place of etches and for the double usage of image I'd go with a word like snapshot in it's place.
On the plus side, the piece depicts a good mental image of the person we hate to see in the mirror sometimes for whatever reason.
Good job babe

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