ineffable [2002-12-04 00:49:36 +0000 UTC]

I bet I could draw you
If you described yourself to me
We would make cool friends
The best that there would be
We both like to cry

first 2 lines are excellent. really caught my attention, put a smile on my face. third line seems a bit trite next to the rest of it. you really like repetition which can work very well but it needs to be laid carfully. the idea in 'We both like to cry' is very good. an interesting twist on perspective of something common. imho it would stand much better just that single line than the repetition under it. just my 2c. nice job.

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riceandprozac [2002-11-17 23:59:37 +0000 UTC]

very pretty. i love the opening line. i really like this! it's just very... pretty.

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nostalgicstar [2002-11-17 23:47:34 +0000 UTC]

yay it let u submit something..
We both like to cry
We both want to die
We both need to fly
And get away
...Get away


Definitly can relate. This is really good..youre extremely talented at pouring youre heart out..i love ya! im here for ya if you need me..

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