carlos-teran [2003-02-28 17:02:30 +0000 UTC]

Haven't seen a poem like this in a long time. It's beautiful and true...

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blinddesecration [2003-01-12 23:08:29 +0000 UTC]

i love it!
it flows, AND its different than your every day poem!!!

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ubetyourboots [2003-01-12 21:26:40 +0000 UTC]

I'll have to disagree with uglymime--the language use in this poem is just fine.

In fact, there's really nothing wrong with the poem, period! Great work. Ubetyourboots.

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theuglymimecynicandr [2003-01-11 22:04:28 +0000 UTC]

WOW...i like this a lot....hrrrm the poem though could use a little more...hrrm..advanced language though.

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nostalgicstar [2003-01-11 21:59:44 +0000 UTC]

I KNOW WHAT ITS ABOUT!!! muwahaha! unprotected sex! lol *cough* im a little hyper, but i love how you wrote this.. like..

And I don't bother
To try
Try and understand
How one mistake
Could so greatly effect
My life


I think because you spaced out "to try" and "my life" from the rest, it adds GREATLY to the overall flow. All that matters however, is that this is a great message, and a SUPERB poem. Its goign straight to my favorites

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