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Published: 2002-11-09 18:08:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 289; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 26
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I used to cry to subsideThe pain that I felt
I would lie, I would pine
Away by myself
The injure is inner
Yet physically felt
And I hate you
I hate you
For bitterness brought
To me by your voice
By your hair
By your games
I've had enough of your shit
I don't want to play
Yet I give into your winning
I keep writing and writing
About stupid old heartbreak that won't go away
I stopped crying
Surprise you?
I stopped being a prick
I stopped throwing up words from you
That made me sick
I stopped talking about how you don't talk to me
I just hid my feelings
What you want me to be
Is over you
Under you
Far, far away
I think you are the one
Who should just go away
And I hate me
I hate me
For feeling this way
Fucking slits on your wrists
Portray my depression
A kiss on your neck
Symbolizes obsession
A knife in your heart
The blood that it sprays
A giant mess to clean up
When this all fades to gray
And I'm dying
I'm dying
You were the cause
For my pills
For my spills
For my hesitant pause
For my frown
For my tears
For everything WET
I relied on your smile
Now look what I get
I get hatred
Betrayal
I figured you'd know
That I'm not just some girl
I care for you so
But I've come to you now to accept your last words
Just leave stupid girl
Is what my ears heard
From your lips to my mind
From your eyes to my spine
I'd cut it all out
Hit stop and rewind.
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Comments: 7
This really speaks to me..
I too, write emotional poetry but nothing quite so spectacular as this. I want to keep this to read over and over, so
thank you.
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Wow - the flow on this was spectacular. As I read it to myself I never missed a beat. Very nice plays on words, etc. My fav part:
For my pills
For my spills
For my hesitant pause
For my frown
For my tears
For everything WET
I dunno why... maybe it's the repitition that stuck out...but very cool.
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this is very well done. though here and there i find a word or two that doesnt sit right with me, the changing rhyme and meter is well done, the repetitions are fitting and theres quite a few really good images and metaphores. great job on this one.
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nice one. your the only peotry ive read in a long time i like it tho
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I like the progression here, how you go from hating him to focusing your feelings on yourself. Also, how you aproach the poem with a sense of finality. For you, everything is over, ready to move on as soon you can. You don't vainly question what went wrong, why did this happen to me.
Finally, the last few lines are an excellent ending to this poem, and manage to close it forcefully, instead of letting your emotions trail off into nothing.
Well done.
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omg this is an awsome poem... its beautiful... so much emotion... toil and trouble... its wonderful adding to my favorates... great job...
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aww i really like the end. This is really good...*sigh* ..youre so much better then this.. i hate jacob!!lkdhsljafio lksajfgoaiu hdslfkasf okay. yeah, good job
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