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Published: 2011-04-10 16:36:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 189; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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HeartI loved you so much,
In the end I couldn't help it,
I wanted your heart in my hands,
And I did whatever it took.
Now I have it; still and unmoving,
In these blood-stained hands of mine,
And I regret it so much,
If only I could go back in time.
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Hmm somehow the last line seems abrupt or disconnected to the rest of the story IMO. Great poem, none-the-less, if you continue to write more stuff you should definitely read a book about it
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when you regret doing something absolutely terrible that can't be undone, wouldn't you want to go back in time and be able to do something so you don't do the terrible thing? *coughsuchaskillingsomeoneyoulovecough*
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yes but... hmm I can't really explain it. It just kinda seems like a sudden stop to me, and time wasn't really brought up before in the piece, while it was already implied they killed their love and regretted it.
Ah, whatever. I'm no expert XD
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it's okay, thanks for the commentation/advice~
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