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Not REAALLY tips, I'm sorry. But it kinda gave me knowledge about comics, about how that works here (In this country). It's annoying.
So yeah, I was proud of myself of how this page turned out, but my english teacher pointed out some important stuff that I should know.

First, this page was made on an half A4 size of paper, mainly because it would be easier to me. But the thing is, the editors are only gonna accept these if they are on a full A4 paper with an acceptable size of margin. Some might accept the size I'm with right now, but they will hardly say "yes".
Second, there are way too many squares on here. As long as what I could understand, important scenes such as Delta jumping off the window, being thrown through the wall and being eaten by that thing may occupy higher spaces than these. My teacher advised to make it cover almost half of the page or a quarter, it also helps on making the scene look more dramatic.
Third, I just glued the squares too much, some people had difficulties to understand the way they should follow to read it.
Fourth, but less important, I messed the shades with random scribbles and also with weird horizon converging waypoint. They were also badly followed.

Mistakes I found myself (because I messed up)
There's darkness-drop-thing above Delta's head on the last panels
Also the weird armor on his elbow is weird
The giant dark snake getting out of the tower doesn't seem to be trying to destroy it, but to go around it.
It looks way too ballony
No one can actually see the guy getting devoured a level under Delta, when he's running through the corridor.
It looks like it's night before seeing Delta jumping out.
You can't identify the big snake on the third square.
Dust doesn't go up when static, neither looks like smoke.
People complained that on the first panel, Delta was about to release a Karate kick.
Onomatopoeias are way too hidden and covered up with ink.
The character doesn't seen to open the mouth neither for breathing.

Description
Not REAALLY tips, I'm sorry. But it kinda gave me knowledge about comics, about how that works here (In this country). It's annoying.
So yeah, I was proud of myself of how this page turned out, but my english teacher pointed out some important stuff that I should know.

First, this page was made on an half A4 size of paper, mainly because it would be easier to me. But the thing is, the editors are only gonna accept these if they are on a full A4 paper with an acceptable size of margin. Some might accept the size I'm with right now, but they will hardly say "yes".
Second, there are way too many squares on here. As long as what I could understand, important scenes such as Delta jumping off the window, being thrown through the wall and being eaten by that thing may occupy higher spaces than these. My teacher advised to make it cover almost half of the page or a quarter, it also helps on making the scene look more dramatic.
Third, I just glued the squares too much, some people had difficulties to understand the way they should follow to read it.
Fourth, but less important, I messed the shades with random scribbles and also with weird horizon converging waypoint. They were also badly followed.

Mistakes I found myself (because I messed up)
There's darkness-drop-thing above Delta's head on the last panels
Also the weird armor on his elbow is weird
The giant dark snake getting out of the tower doesn't seem to be trying to destroy it, but to go around it.
It looks way too ballony
No one can actually see the guy getting devoured a level under Delta, when he's running through the corridor.
It looks like it's night before seeing Delta jumping out.
You can't identify the big snake on the third square.
Dust doesn't go up when static, neither looks like smoke.
People complained that on the first panel, Delta was about to release a Karate kick.
Onomatopoeias are way too hidden and covered up with ink.
The character doesn't seen to open the mouth neither for breathing.