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Published: 2006-02-26 00:57:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 91; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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Under lash moons, like eyes bruisedBlack and gaping like a skull
That doesn't know it's dead and never buried...
Pick up her bones, and brush the soft smooth dirt crumbles
So that they flake off and fall to the ground in spirals.
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I hope you chose to continue in a writing major when you go on to college. You have a natural talent and with a bit of guidance, you will surely master any poetic form. I've enjoyed reading your poetry. You should really stop being so modest and saying that it isn't very good, or underestimating your own talent. Even your shorter prose have so much detail and flavor to them.
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Christ, thank you. I really appreciate your comments, I feel all confident now! haha. I actually haven't been writing much lately...I do tend to get kind of overly critical and manic, everything just kind of goes to shit and I end up crumpling paper after paper, and throwing them away. Maybe I'll give it another go sometime soon.
Thank you again!
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Hey, keep the stuff you through away. Even if in whole... it may have been without form or less than what you like... but later on, you might rework the poem or find a snippet from it that will work in a different form when you are a better writer. As time goes on, you'll find your poetry will improve, just keep writing every time you have a prose, be it only one line, that comes to mind. Keep a lil' prose journal. Keep it with you everywhere you go, and write bits as they come to you... worry about making them into a masterpiece later. I've written a small amount of poetry and songs, but I've never shared them. I'm kind of thinking of going through those and putting them on here. Some of them weren't too bad. Btw, I love that line in your sig... "you cry to easily....everything would burn". To me, that means, that in a world full of sin, without the tears of pity and love, our world would be entirely doomed. I cry when I watch the news. I care too much. I care about strangers. I care about the state of our world. Any way, don't expect every work to be a masterpiece, you have to sketch alot of pictures to master the form.
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You definitely should post your poetry/prose/songs, love! I would love to read them and I'm sure they're wonderful.
I love the line in my signature also - it's from the book "Wasteland" by Francesca Lia Block (who is one of my favorite authors. Her books/stories are so BEAUTIFUL - stories told in prose...she's absolutely amazing.)
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Hmmm, I might check her out if I remember to. I have a ton of stuff I'd written stashed in places. it'll be alot of work, just to go through and retype it all. Most of them were songs. I haven't sung many of them in a long time. They were from less happy days, and I look back on these songs in a different way now. I've changed so much as I've grown older. Wiser? I hope so.
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oh thats so beautiful! you have suca unique talent--great work!!
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