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Published: 2012-11-10 18:33:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 6882; Favourites: 217; Downloads: 636
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"i want grandchildren."that car ride ruined some things
threw a wine bottle at the wall
15 years sitting
it was good enough or
it wasn't good enough
all the silence forced
my pride to jump out the window
if any rested in her
she showed it off like a speech bubble
tied it to her teeth
slammed it in the door
had it under her pillow for months
and years and years and years
there was no statement
there was no outstretched hand
just steering wheel clenching
knuckles white and jaw taut
(all because who i bed was not her mindful of
timeline perfection)
i still think i'm a tumor
--
she shows it off like a speeding ticket
i put a pin through it
i put it on her sweater
she never wears it
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Comments: 52
Very deep and thought provoking. I also write its an amazing way of self expression.
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I... I don't understand... This is beautiful, but... It... I... *speechless*
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Unique topic, and very well expressed. The tone is interesting and easy to feel, and I like the imagery.
There's one line that doesn't seem quite right: "all because who i bed was not her mindful of
timeline perfection"
I understand what you're saying in it, but the way the words are used isn't quite right. I think if you switched the word "mindful" to "idea" it would make more sense, as "mindful" isn't a noun.
Congrats on the DD!
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Aah, yes, the infamous "I want grandchildren." My mother has been pressing that upon me since I was a little girl. Only one problem- I don't want kids. AT ALL. Sure, I wanna find a man and get married and whatnot, but I have absolutely no desire for children (especially if they had the same relationship with me as I have with my mom).
So yeah, the only part I can really relate to, but that doesn't make the rest any less beautiful. Congrats on the DD!
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I look at this, then I look at the comments and see the stereotypical, usual, boring, comments that iv seen on a hundred different Daily Deviations.
And to be honest, it is powerful, you did a fantastic job on conveying your emotions. I would like to say that I understand this, but I don't. I let my own mother out of my life years ago..
but somehow, I know this is the same reaction she'd have. I can't tell you all the emotion that came to pass while I read this. All I can say is good luck, and don't give up.
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my mother stopped loving me too.
she's very kind right now, but sometimes I doubt her.
even if we talk, there's a subject that I will never touch again.
maybe I'm just a spoiled kid and maybe she loves me with her heart.
but I still feel the same thing I felt that day.
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very powerful how it starts off with that first line that's practically a universal expectation of parents(not everyone wants to fulfill that, it's not everyones destined fate whether its because one is gay, can't concieve or just doesn't want to), then how it goes into that feeling of not being viewed as okay unless these expectations are met to provide grandchildren
I like how this piece can be relate-able on more than one level
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Epic, well written. And it's a statement many of us had heard. I'm tired the social stigma that says all women have to get married and/or have kids. What if I like being single? What if I like to have neices and nephews but don't care to have kids of my own? I don't even think I'd make a good parent, knowing my own personality. Why would I want to bring a kid into that kind of life?
THanks for writing this. People like me need it.
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This is amazing. The imagery is gripping, and the words seem just a bit vicious.
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WOW!!! Such intensity. I'll need to read this a few more times, just to soak in more with each passing.
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My father said that and it broke my heart for him because I am unable to bear/care for children even if I'd like to.
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My father ruined a car ride with that same statement. He'll have no grandchildren from Me.
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Congrats on the well deserved DD!
Very emotional poem, i hope things will get better for you
Have a nice day!
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makes me think of almost every conversation I have with my dad nowadays...now that I'm an adult he keeps trying to make sure that I'm looking for a man...and that I plan to have as many kids as possible. I've told him time and time again that nothing has changed in the past ten years, and I don't want to have kids, but he doesn't listen...
beautiful poetry, I get a lot of emotion out of it, and I can picture the scene perfectly through the emotions present
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Reminds me of the tension when I came out to my parents. I have been with my spouse for nine years now and my mother is finally coming around. I had kept it from her for two years and one night told her that I don't really want to be with a boy, because I am with a woman - granted she had been throwing the prospect of boys in my face for a long time and even making snide comments about how my cousins were married to the opposite sex, really disheartening. :/
This poem hits home too about the struggles of appealing to parents. *hugs* I hope it gets better for you. <3
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I know the feeling. It's not quite the same with me but very similar
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Wow.....I don't know how to feel about this......I guess I sympathize and can't at the same time. 
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awww!
That was beautiful-and sad...just aww...
Here:
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You're really brave and beautiful and this piece is poetry from the heart, striking straight through it, too. Did I mention how beautiful your soul is?
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oh you~~
and thank you very much, lovely, your soul is radiant.
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Awwh, you really are such a treasure!
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The ways that you use language and description in this are mind-blowingly beautiful. I can feel your emotion seep out of my screen and latch on to me. I really think this is one of the best things you've ever written
And as far as the subject goes, I think its personal significance to you helped make this poem so amazing. I do hope that your mother comes to understand you over time
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eep
thanks joshu. i really appreciate it. c:
and i hope so too! aheh
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i really loved this , it seemed very personal and was beautifully written , if you dont mind me asking is it about your sexuality ? thats what i picked up , sorry for asking if your dont want to answer that but i loved the poem
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oh no, it's no problem!
yeah, it's about my sexuality and how i came out to my mom.
it didn't go well, obviously, aheh.
but thank you! c:
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you're welcome 
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thanks 
i hope she does, too.
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your welcome , good luck
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This poem has an impressive message. I love the emotion evoked and your unusual way with words. Just as *glossolalias quoted on their feature of you, "she showed it off like a speech bubble
tied it to her teeth" - this line not only surprised me but made me chuckle despite the depressing nature of your poem. It's a funny image which goes to show your skill with imagery. Wonderful work!
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thank you so much.
i really appreciate what you said. c:
just
thank you again! C:
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your work has been featured here: [link] please go check out the other pieces & have a nice day
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oh gosh wow thank you so much!
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you're welcome!
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