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Published: 2008-10-12 22:05:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 356; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 6
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-Beautiful ravenLonely phantom of the night
Shrouded by shadows
-Glistening dewdrops
Scattered over morning leaves
Quench their early thirst
-Northern sky above
Brightening the sullen day
Bring me your warm light
-Hollow broken souls
Hazing vision with the past
Keep away from sight
-Reckless collision
Metal sparks streaking the street
Giving stars their glow
-Moonless obsession
Stark black void beyond all reach
Feeding the novas
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Thank you very much, dear. 
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Doesn't the dew have to be around there roots for their thirst to be quenched?
Lovely though.
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Thank you, but it takes virtually no talent to compose a haiku.
Yeah, but I wasn't really paying any attention to what I was writing when I composed those.
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Oh well, it's something to pass the time.
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I suppose. I plan to make a second collection, but I don't know when I'll start it. I'm supposed to be doing a couple of collab. projects with my buddy,
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Always plugging jaime eh?
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She's the bestest! We're gonna work on stories together. ^^
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It will be. She's a much better writer than I am, but she claims that she cannot construct a poem. *coughs loudly* I'm sure she could if she tried. 
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What is it a fanfic of? Or should I just read it to find out? o.o
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Well, it's of characters off Sonic the Hedgehog. It's very good!
...Sry, not trying to pester you, but I'm trying to advertise her story. 
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I read part of it and got freaked out. :\
I'm a big fan of sonic games btw.
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I love them! That's what mine and Jaime's stories are going to be based around. You see, we've both had our own little projects since last year, but neither of us ever worked on them. We're gonna help each other out and write both of them together and then we'll post them on our joint account, . We'll start on hers first, I think.
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Do you not know what a haiku is?
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Well, that's alright. I'll teach you!
Ok, a haiku is a 3-line poem. It has a simple structure that deals with syllables.
1st line: 5 syllables
2nd line: 7 syllables
3rd line: 5 syllables
Haikus usually pertain to nature, but I play around with mine a bit.
So now that you know what they are, do you like mine?
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yeah!...but Im to lazy to do one
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They're really easy. They can make novices sound good, I promise.
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Your message is a LIE!!!! I CAN'T WRITE HAIKUS!!!!!!
Other than that, these are great.
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Seriously, give it a try. It really takes zero talent to create a haiku.
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Um, okay. It's five words, seven words, then five again, right?
"I really feel like shit.
Nose runs, eyes red, throat hurts, headache.
Gotta go see the doctor."
Ha! You're right! I put absolutely no effort into that at all!
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No, hon, it's syllables. Five, seven, five applies to the number of syllables in each line. You're supposed to use mainly descriptive words and not filler words such as the ones you used in your first and third lines. I promise you could create one while intoxicated.
....hmm. Sounds like a plan...
Unfortunately not. I've gotta go to work in the morning and I am currently surviving on a mere 4 1/2 hours of sleep.
Oh yeah, and I'm sorry about your sickness and/or disease.
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Waahhh! 
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Right. AIDS, stupidity and breast cancer.
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No! That's a load of crap! Away 40 m my ass! That sux... I wuz too late...
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Yeah, now look who's too late. I missed you by five min.
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I'm glad someone enjoys them.
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