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Published: 2017-01-09 09:13:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 340; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 0
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You said you'd accept me for who I wasEven though I didn't know who I was
(But you didn't know this)
So when I found a part of myself
I was burning with a fierce joy
But then you told me to wait another 4 years
To wait to make my decision
You said it was a spur of the moment
Influenced by other things
You didn't know how much I felt
About this part of me
And I had no idea
How to put it into words
So I said I would wait
Wait for another four years
Until I was free from your decisions
And could pay my way to myself
And so I am waiting
Even though it pains me
Makes me clench my teeth
And curl my fists
Want to scream
To you
To the world
"That's not me!"
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I like this and I do like figurative language more too. I feel like that it gets the point across more. :3
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Personally I do prefer poems with more figurative language (maybe because that's what I try to do with my own poetry). I think some parts of your poetry are quite straightforward - for instance, I wouldn't use the phrase "wait another four years" in my poetry - however, overall I don't think your poems are too obvious despite their simplicity 
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Ok. Thanks for the feedback. I, myself do want to try to be more figurative (at least in some ofย my poems - it depends on the one)ย so I'll keep this in mind when writing my next poem. Thanks again.
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