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TheStrangercalledJim — 11
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Published: 2007-09-16 22:33:38 +0000 UTC; Views: 181; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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You always double down on elevenCasino highs and broken apologies
Leave you walking home with your fingers in your pockets
Another distraught week of disappointment
Feel just what your kid feels
Just one more nail in the coffin of estrangement
From one half of her heritage
Nothing left to do but tie that final knot, place the final bullet in the chamber
Take that last fatal step and turn the gas on
In your mind, you can’t change the past
Disillusioned in the face of the present
And just so much dust and ash in your little one’s future
They don’t want to know your name, your game, nor your lowly actions
Your crime, your time, your interactions
No sympathy, no courtroom murmurs
All disclosure and no friendly faces
They know what characteristic ends your hands have dealt
But your memory fails.
As you stare blankly forward into the faces of unknown acts
Lain bare for all to see
The gallery looks on
You stand to order
As the judge brings down his gavel
You realise too late,
Never double down on eleven
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Comments: 12
Do you write songs or poetry or both?
I can really see your texts in music. They are so alive...
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I think i first started off writing in song-form and then gradually evolved into poetry but then again, i don't know where the line is drawn for that definition.
Where do lyrics end and poetry begin?
I enjoy Leonard Cohen & Jim Morrisson's lyrics, and i think i'd consider them to be poets alongside their calling as musicians.
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I think i need to get some of their books so i can take some inspiration from them. It's a pity I don't have a good voice otherwise I'd love to front a band or maybe learn piano so i can do something with vocals/piano...that would be an awesome dream to finally do. Just for myself.
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Mmm, me too... But maybe you can take some singing-lessons?
I have a piano, a guitarr, a not too bad voice and a sister who wants to make music with me.. But we just never do it. I just cant sing and play at the same time, and I'm too shy to sing a capella.
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Maybe...it'll be something i'll have to look into but total side note..i've just bought a new camera *squee* and you're the first to know about it here 
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Exciting, looking forward to see the result...
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..and if you look my recent submissions you can judge for yourself
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"As you stare blankly forward into the faces of unknown acts
Lain bare for all to see
The gallery looks on"
AHmazing.
i was actually singing it like a "At the drive in" song.
good job, turk!
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Thanks J.d, i always have Omar reverberating around my head when i'm writing for some reason.
and.....
'she's just a small-town girl...
'...living in a lonely world, she takes the midnight train, going an-ne-where!'
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That was very interesting and well written. I wish I could write that well.
I'd read it, if you wrote said short story.
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Well the short story i spoke of was actually inspired by these lyrics but isn't the story of what happened here, if you get me?
When I get motivated into doing work, it 'tends to snowball a fair bit so we'll have to see how i get on with writing it.
but thank you for the kind words
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