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TheStrangercalledJim β Made you wrong
Published: 2005-07-10 04:07:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 171; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 6
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Dead battery cellPlaced inside your mouth
Illuminate your eyes again
Vision repaired
But is it wrong
Making you a different way
No longer blood run your veins
But synthetic substitute
No internal heat
More internal power core
I have your touch returned
With parts missing
Looking the same
But something has gone
Memories copied
Set to upload
From a damaged source
To a corrupted system
I made you wrong
The colour drains from me
Realisation crushing my hope
Holding you close
I donβt know who you are
In doubt
I reset
And collapse inside
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Comments: 9
what a freeky situation your poem has put me in. But it feels good, so im not complaining
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Thats a good thing, i like to think that my writing makes people think about what i'm saying.
Thanks bro...
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From reading that it seems like it'd work like a Postal Service track... assuming you've heard their stuff.
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yeah i've heard some of their stuff but i don't think i know them well enough to pluck their name out of the hat to say it was similar if you get me bud...
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the photo goes along so well. a scary, gloomy feeling...
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yeah i was hoping to get that 'looking back' on the situation feel...kind of foreboding..and fun to take actually..it might have been good to submit on its own...
thanks for the comment bud..
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hmmm interesting perspective ... fascinating
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Thnaks for the kind words....it's always good to hear others perspective on my work too
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