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This isn't my usual haikuThe 1st and 3rd line are five syllables whilst the others have a seven syllable count. This took me much longer than my usual works to complete (ahem 4-5 hours including the editing).
Stocks are from:
- [link]
- [link]
- [link]
and yes the original title name and idea progressed from the hunger games though this is my own work and nothing to do with it other than for inspiriational matters
hope you guys like it
All critiques would be welcome and appreciated as I would like to know how I should improve and the good points of the work I do
P.s. please do not copy or redistribute without my permission, thank you
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Comments: 83
DanCrystalis [2012-11-03 17:17:01 +0000 UTC]
nice photo manipulation can really fell the darkness. i also really like the poem, only thing is the font could have been done so much more creatively to add that horror mood
but really nice piece
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thewritingthimble In reply to DanCrystalis [2012-11-03 19:44:26 +0000 UTC]
thank you and yeah I know but it was a case of it looks pretty or people can read it... so I kind of went with the latter ^^' I know the font spoils it a bit though
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ivanka-a [2012-10-31 22:10:27 +0000 UTC]
Looks cool! The poem adds to the chilling effect!
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Parfum-de-feuille [2012-10-27 15:30:41 +0000 UTC]
I like the atmosphere, it's frightening, there is a story or something behind it..it's mysterious..Well doneβ₯
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thewritingthimble In reply to Parfum-de-feuille [2012-10-28 16:50:54 +0000 UTC]
thankies berry muchly
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YellowChello [2012-10-08 22:27:29 +0000 UTC]
wow... almost frightening..
well done. (I'm just brainstorming here, take it or leave it ,) maybe if the text was in a different , more eery font, it would help bring out the dark side even more. make sure it's still readable though~
hope this helps.. !
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thewritingthimble In reply to YellowChello [2012-10-09 16:46:29 +0000 UTC]
hehe thanks ^_^ and yeah I tried with the font the conclusion was I could either have it readable or pretty heehee ... defo gonna get a bigger file stock for next time though
that way I can have both and win mwahahaha
hehe
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Sarrain [2012-09-26 07:43:12 +0000 UTC]
The picture really compliments the darkness of the poem. That's not to say that the poem wouldn't be good without the pic, because believe me even without it this poem is powerful despite it's briefness. Very nice writing indeed!
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thewritingthimble In reply to Sarrain [2012-09-27 00:39:57 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for your lovely comment!!
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gloomiest [2012-09-23 18:18:58 +0000 UTC]
I love it! It's creepy and I like the athmosphere and everything in this pic.
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thewritingthimble In reply to gloomiest [2012-09-23 23:52:06 +0000 UTC]
hehe thanks ! ^_^
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FluffehPickleLivi [2012-09-23 17:47:09 +0000 UTC]
Isn't there a poem that katniss used to sing before her father died in The Hunger Games series?
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thewritingthimble In reply to FluffehPickleLivi [2012-09-23 17:59:46 +0000 UTC]
yup That's where I got the inspiration from
i think it's something like this:
'are you, are you coming to the tree,
which once strung a man who say murdered three,
strange things did happen there,
no stranger woud it be,
if we met up at midnight,
in the hanging tree'. boom to my memory hehe!!!
this isn't my version of it as such I just liked the concept not really the story behind it so yup
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FluffehPickleLivi In reply to thewritingthimble [2012-09-23 19:39:53 +0000 UTC]
Thats awesome!
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thewritingthimble In reply to FluffehPickleLivi [2012-09-23 23:52:51 +0000 UTC]
teehee thankies muchly!!
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FluffehPickleLivi In reply to thewritingthimble [2012-09-24 00:12:28 +0000 UTC]
no pwobbies :3
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MordorLegion [2012-09-21 16:01:30 +0000 UTC]
Very Nice!
Here is a poem from me to you, because of your nice art:
"Weeping willows whisper wise,
from the form of fallen skys,
broken like the neck he dances,
high above the earth his feed,
through the mist the light now glances,
like hope that he will never meet."
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thewritingthimble In reply to MordorLegion [2012-09-22 18:22:39 +0000 UTC]
thanks
and wowzers to the poem in your comment!!!
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MordorLegion In reply to thewritingthimble [2012-09-22 22:48:12 +0000 UTC]
It would be a honor for me to write a poem which you release in one of your pictures... If you like...
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thewritingthimble In reply to MordorLegion [2012-09-23 00:25:05 +0000 UTC]
I would (your poem was freaking AWESOME) but I don't have the time to edit stuff lately I've just started 6th form (an equivalent to college) and I've got stuff at home as well .... any stuff I'll post myself won't be anything new as I don't have the time- in the future I'd definately consider it though
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MordorLegion In reply to thewritingthimble [2012-09-27 18:26:42 +0000 UTC]
Just write me a note, if you like and have time for new projects...
I would be fun for me to write a poem for one of your pictures!
And: good luck with your 6th form!
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thewritingthimble In reply to MordorLegion [2012-09-27 18:53:09 +0000 UTC]
thank you and will do
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MordorLegion In reply to thewritingthimble [2012-09-27 22:30:45 +0000 UTC]
I'm looking forward ^^
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Valkaneer [2012-09-21 15:33:34 +0000 UTC]
lol, at the !
I love it!
And could you be any more complex with your poem?
(joke)
Nice one!
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AletPhantom [2012-09-20 19:06:41 +0000 UTC]
I very much enjoyed this, and I'm really not a fan of poetry, let alone haiku. Thank you.
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thewritingthimble In reply to AletPhantom [2012-09-20 21:20:57 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you liked it!
P.s. It's tanka not haiku hehe
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00111 [2012-09-19 19:22:08 +0000 UTC]
Nicely done, I like that strange feel this gives off.
( although that might be my cold )
Anyway, really nicely done. Kind of makes me wonder if i could do something similiar..
I'll better stick to my work
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The-Anariarch [2012-09-18 23:32:40 +0000 UTC]
Prepare to Broadside.
[link]
many Thanks for the inspiration.
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thewritingthimble In reply to The-Anariarch [2012-09-19 00:10:46 +0000 UTC]
aww that's really awesome !! :') I'm glad that you liked mine so much that you made own
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Mellucy [2012-09-18 21:20:14 +0000 UTC]
hm, I've never heard of a tanka but it surely sounds interesting and worth giving it a shot one day Nonetheless, I loved yours!
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thewritingthimble In reply to Mellucy [2012-09-18 21:51:09 +0000 UTC]
hehe thank you !!!
here's the site that I used to start off with if you're interested!
[link]
it has other types on it as well ^_^ but that's the link to the tanka page
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Mellucy In reply to thewritingthimble [2012-09-18 22:41:48 +0000 UTC]
Thanks a lot, I hope to be able to try it out soon
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thewritingthimble In reply to Mellucy [2012-09-19 00:09:17 +0000 UTC]
hehe you're berry welcome you'll have to send me a link!
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Christianonfire7 [2012-09-18 19:20:12 +0000 UTC]
As soon as I saw the title I knew it must relate to The Hunger Games. XD
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thewritingthimble In reply to Christianonfire7 [2012-09-18 21:49:08 +0000 UTC]
hehe yesssss I stole the title
XD
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Capere-Omnes [2012-09-17 21:30:43 +0000 UTC]
I love the mysterious feel this piece has to it.
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RoamingWithDragons [2012-09-16 20:16:06 +0000 UTC]
This is a masterpiece! Seems like something Edgar Allen Poe would write
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thewritingthimble In reply to RoamingWithDragons [2012-09-16 22:58:57 +0000 UTC]
Awwwww I'm glad that you like it!!!
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