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Description Timmy the Reaper



                 Created by Tyler Gates  





Warning: This written series is overly ridiculous and may cause some readers to go "wtf". Oh, it also has some nasty themes and gore n' stuff too.





"Doomdation"



(o.o) As in like this being the first chapter is like the 'foundation' of 'doom', get it, get it? I crack myself up





    Hot water rushes from the tap, creating more steam and fogging up the bathroom as the young Lylah relaxes deep within the tub after a long day of work as a dog's nail-stylist. Soaking in the lovely mass of H2O, she slightly smiles in total bliss – life couldn't be better.



    The water then quickly becomes dyed as if were now black ink, bubbling with acidity as her flesh rapidly melts away from her bones. Her intestines oozing out into the blackness, slowly swirling around like a mini-whirlpool as a gruesome and absolutely terrifying creature emerges, a true incarnation of death – a small mopey-boy blinks at her. [(o.o) ignore the fact that she should already be dead ] Lylah screams in horror, causing the small pale boy to cover his small pale ears with his small pale hands hidden under his small (but not pale. HA!) black hood and robes.



    "WHO ARE YOU!?" She screams at the top of her slowly melting away-lungs.



     The boy blinks, uncovering his ears as he sighs, "I'm, I'm just Timmy…,"he then moves his hands into his robes, rummaging around for something. Tears forming in her eyes, Lylah manages to calm herself down [(o.o) it's a wonder how she could considering her current circumstance] and then sniffles, "What, what a-are you doing?"



     The boy looks at her tilting his head to the side slightly, finally getting hold of what he was looking for as he reveals a giant black scythe with a shimmering silver blade. An incredibly childish voice echoes out from the weapon, "YAY!~ I get to kill things~"



     Lylah screams again, leaving Timmy to sigh heavily while the scythe cringes, "OWOWOWOW! Timmy she's attacking us with banshee powers!" The screaming is halted when black tentacles swiftly burst from the dark water, entangling and constricting the remains of her body, and wrapping around her mouth, keeping it crushed shut. [(o.o)I know what you're thinking………tentacle porn] Lylah whimpers as the small Timmy approaches her through the bath, "To clear up any confusion let me explain. I am Timmy, I may look like a small 7-year-old but I'm way, way older than that since I'm a Reaper, or Death Incarnate, whatever. Now, you have been 'Named', and so I have to kill you, since I'm a Reaper, simple really. You understand?" The tentacles vanish into mist, allowing her to respond while she looks directly into Timmy's eyes of melancholy.



     She then slightly shrugs, "……Ummmmmmmmmmmm…….no?" Within an instant her head is sent thudding against a wall with a swing from Timmy's scythe, it rattling in the glory of the moment, "YAY! I'm dirty~ I wanna be more dirty, hurry n' do the change thingy!" It says with impatience.



      Timmy soon pulls out a small bottle made of tiny gremlin skulls from his robe, tipping a bit of its oozing-white contents [(o.o) *giggles*] onto the bathroom floor, making the room glow bright red while it warps and moulds. Timmy then looks around at what now appears to be the scene of a terrible accident, with Lylah's corpse (now with a head attached) situated on the floor, appearing as though she has tripped over the tub and hit the ground and died. Timmy then rests his bloodied-scythe over his shoulder, disappearing into a newly-formed abyss vortex while whistling Don't Fear the Reaper by Blue Oyster Cult.



To be disembodied...


AUDITIONS ARE BEING HELD FOR THE TIMMY THE REAPER ANIMATION ->news.deviantart.com/article/15…
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Comments: 121

Atticus-Morwing [2012-03-03 11:50:59 +0000 UTC]

Hmm...I should've read this earlier.
Pretty good stuff, gonna read through everything.
Besides, it'll make participating in the contest much more fun,
if I can create a really related Reaper.

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Immaculus In reply to Atticus-Morwing [2012-03-05 08:05:04 +0000 UTC]

The more you read will mean the better you understand the 'Timmyverse' lore, which would allow you to ceate a character closer to canon. That in itself would be an advantage in this contest (By the way, the editing time for these chapters was short so there are plenty grammatical errors haha)

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Atticus-Morwing In reply to Immaculus [2012-03-05 08:55:34 +0000 UTC]

True.
Also, I don't really mind that (=typos) much, as long as the story in itself will be interesting.
We'll see~

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Immaculus In reply to Atticus-Morwing [2012-03-26 09:31:31 +0000 UTC]

and has been interesting for you?

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Atticus-Morwing In reply to Immaculus [2012-03-26 20:29:18 +0000 UTC]

So far, yes. Wish I had more time to read tho.

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LightLoveAngel [2011-11-06 06:45:44 +0000 UTC]

hahah i like it, however the little artists comments in it are distracting, BUT it adds to the silliness

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Immaculus In reply to LightLoveAngel [2012-03-05 08:06:02 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I've gotten a lot of feedback saying the same thing. It's too late to change now, since the series is over. But I will keep it in mind for later projects.

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LightLoveAngel In reply to Immaculus [2012-03-05 20:43:19 +0000 UTC]

hehe, alright :]

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Acellan [2011-11-01 03:17:44 +0000 UTC]

well then, its not every day the reaper comes and melts the flesh from your bones ^+^

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Suzy-Ane [2011-09-19 21:52:51 +0000 UTC]

I'm laughing hysterically right now.

I prolly shouldn't have said that.
OHWELLZIES
Not because it's bad.
Becauseilavit.
Amd teh notes you stuffehd in it.

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Immaculus In reply to Suzy-Ane [2011-09-23 12:09:48 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Chezzy-Am [2011-09-19 18:57:15 +0000 UTC]

this has got to be the most admirably silly and addictive piece of dA literature I have read in a long time. and the author comments were top knotch hahaha you sir deserve because I can't afford cookies, , points and frankly jark would be happy to play with Timmy... hahahah timmy is soo cute and awkward good work

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Immaculus In reply to Chezzy-Am [2011-09-23 12:10:18 +0000 UTC]

thanks hope you keep reading

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Chezzy-Am In reply to Immaculus [2011-09-23 14:37:27 +0000 UTC]

Yeah I read part 2. Hilarious

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AmbigiousNothing [2011-09-19 16:52:40 +0000 UTC]

>w< so much love for this~ <3

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Immaculus In reply to AmbigiousNothing [2011-09-23 12:10:37 +0000 UTC]

^.^ thankies

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cheeriosbdr529 [2011-09-15 23:14:16 +0000 UTC]

OMG LOLOOLLLLLLLL

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Trezykx [2011-08-28 04:19:47 +0000 UTC]

You have an ...odd style? odd enough to make reading your odd story interesting. but it really has a B' rate movie style to it. Which brings me back to the classic 80's horrors, they were all B's and made a much bigger impression on viewers than all of the C-G crap of today could ever hope to.

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Immaculus In reply to Trezykx [2011-08-29 09:09:20 +0000 UTC]

haha, I'm in total agreeance with you and yeah this series was one of my more 'unconventional' pieces of work, and hey, that's what it's all about

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FallenAngelKokoro [2011-08-23 05:45:00 +0000 UTC]

this is fairly interesting :3 a bit short but very interesting and straight to the point as well XD

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Immaculus In reply to FallenAngelKokoro [2011-08-24 08:26:09 +0000 UTC]

haha the first chapter was written short because it was originally just to see how people resonded to the series. No point goin over the top if no one liked it xD

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FallenAngelKokoro In reply to Immaculus [2011-08-30 06:09:23 +0000 UTC]

ah true~

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AzeeraTheNinja [2011-08-18 16:58:29 +0000 UTC]

Hello there,

The goal of #PennedPaper is to provide exposure to the under-appreciated writers of dA and to provide feedback on all works submitted to us. For this reason we do not accept deviations already found in six or more other group galleries at the time of submission to us. This is not an attack on the artist and has nothing to do with the quality of the deviation. For this reason, your work has been declined. For more information please read this news article [link]

You are welcome to submit other pieces found in less than six other group galleries to us.

Thank you,
=AzeeraTheNinja - #PennedPaper

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Devilish-Motives [2011-08-07 01:38:17 +0000 UTC]

AH! XD That made me laugh XD I like his scythe XD "YAY, I'M DIRTY!!!" XD

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Immaculus In reply to Devilish-Motives [2011-08-09 05:13:23 +0000 UTC]

haha, yep good ol' Scythe.

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icy7 [2011-08-06 01:57:56 +0000 UTC]

Timmy's badass

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Immaculus In reply to icy7 [2011-08-06 02:38:25 +0000 UTC]

indeed he is

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mirosango14 [2011-08-06 01:53:14 +0000 UTC]

very cool concept! I'm assuming you've read Soul Eater? this reminds me A LOT of Soul Eater...
some constructive criticism:
1. if you have something to say about your story, you should say it in artist comments. not in the middle of the story. it breaks the concentration of the reader, and it doesn't look that professional, especially when you have a place to put all those comments (unlike fanfiction/fictionpress.net).
2. paragraphs are groups of sentences that are about one subject. two people talking in the same paragraph is a HUGE no-no, as it can confuse the reader. plus, short paragraphs are easier to read! (you can however get away with this by not putting someone's speech in quotation marks. for example: "Hey," I shouted to my friend Erica, "Did you by any chance locate my cloud bugs? I need to stop a drought in Utah, but I can't find them anywhere!" Erica groaned and informed me, for the billionth time, that she had no idea where my cloud bugs were, and I should just stop asking her before she caused my head to explode.)
hope I helped!

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Immaculus In reply to mirosango14 [2011-08-06 02:36:44 +0000 UTC]

actually, the most I've seen of Soul Eater is a 2 min clip that I saw after this series was written. Any similarities I'd base on the fact that a talking weapon/scythe and reaper-themed story are not incredibly original for a series, but that wasn't an issue for me really since it wasn't so much the theme I wanted to make original but more so how it was structured. And I should clarify that this series (which has finished on other sites but not on dA yet, with 30 chapters) was written when I had not studied paragraphs and dialogue, though it improves later in the series when I had looked at it more thoroughly. The "(o.o)" comments are by no means designed to make this look professional, and in fact my goal was the opposite. This series, as you later realise more, is non-sequitur, illogical and random at times with a mix of black comedy. But, as I have stressed before to ppl who have said the same...don't look at the comments as add-ons by me, that (o.o) is no less a character than say Timmy, just because they don't interact doesn't mean any different. This comments are part of the story, they just act in parallel and are made to break the fourth wall to the reader to give a greater experience. Changing their position would ruin the whole point of them, and too many like them just as much as those who find them distracting to alter them, if you see my point?

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mirosango14 In reply to Immaculus [2011-08-06 13:51:04 +0000 UTC]

aha I haven't seen/read that much of Soul Eater either.
well I'm glad your grammar improves later (I'm a bit of a Grammar Nazi, although not as much as some people ) and WOAH! looks like you really know how to defend your ideas! I did enjoy the (o.o) commentary, and if you're not going for professionalism, then they're fine by me.

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Immaculus In reply to mirosango14 [2011-08-06 22:12:32 +0000 UTC]

haha, I don't consider it defending so much as it is explaining but I am glad you commented hope you read on and enjoy the other chapters and the many more that are yet to be posted

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mom1995577 [2011-08-04 16:12:37 +0000 UTC]

the syth made me laugh! haha!
i think this is a very intresting story. and i did NOT go 'wtf'....lol

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andrewhurleys [2011-07-29 21:11:34 +0000 UTC]

huh. interesting, I like your inputs like "(ignore the fact that she should already be dead)" I chuckled at those, good job

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Immaculus In reply to andrewhurleys [2011-07-30 05:19:37 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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andrewhurleys In reply to Immaculus [2011-07-30 23:16:49 +0000 UTC]

no problem (:

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ozu95supein [2011-07-27 18:11:33 +0000 UTC]

O-o, 0-0'o,, O O
4 & {this is supposed to be sweat}
----

interestingly disturbing

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Immaculus In reply to ozu95supein [2011-07-30 05:19:59 +0000 UTC]

I see o.o

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PuzzledHeartBox [2011-07-25 06:35:45 +0000 UTC]

LOL, Timmy is awesome.

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Immaculus In reply to PuzzledHeartBox [2011-07-26 08:41:39 +0000 UTC]

haha I tend to agree xP

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emilymz [2011-07-24 02:09:17 +0000 UTC]

Amazing

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Immaculus In reply to emilymz [2011-07-24 06:19:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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emilymz In reply to Immaculus [2011-07-24 19:04:35 +0000 UTC]

no probs

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LittlexEmoxGirl [2011-07-23 16:23:20 +0000 UTC]

This made my day...

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Immaculus In reply to LittlexEmoxGirl [2011-07-24 06:20:34 +0000 UTC]

^.^ glad to hear it (or read it...you know what I mean )

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Nightreign123 [2011-07-23 11:23:46 +0000 UTC]

ya know I have only one thing to say to this... WTF?!

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Immaculus In reply to Nightreign123 [2011-07-23 11:29:57 +0000 UTC]

lols

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dotafunky [2011-07-22 18:06:12 +0000 UTC]

haha it made me laugh for some messed up reason

thank you for joining my group, by the way

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Third-rate In reply to dotafunky [2011-07-22 18:53:31 +0000 UTC]

It's cool and yay haha

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Manwraith91 [2011-07-22 17:08:49 +0000 UTC]

Gotta admit, I would not have ever bothered looking at this if it didn't have that catchy 'Doomdation' picture title

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Immaculus In reply to Manwraith91 [2011-07-23 04:59:59 +0000 UTC]

and now that you have read it what do you think? o.o

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