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toaddmanz — My Demons
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Published: 2007-04-26 05:39:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 191; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 2
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The demons inside, ripping me apart,Everything you hate, everything you fear,
All of those emotions ripping through my heart,
Ripping me apart.
My demons torture me everyday,
Showing me what I COULD have had,
What I SHOULD have had,
What I WOULD have had,
If I'd just let myself go,
If I'd just let the demons go,
If I'd just let everything go,
Ripping me apart.
I feel them constantly, tearing my world apart,
My whole world existing only in my heart,
My heart being ripped to shreds to placate the hunger in dread,
The whole of me riding a typhoon, trying to hold on,
Trying to not let my world tear apart,
Trying to not let them rip me apart.
Until the day finally comes when my demons rip me apart,
When they finally shred my heart,
When that day comes, the world will tremble,
Your world, the world inside of my heart,
Ripping everything apart.
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Comments: 9
Thanks, I still think it's horrid, but the emotions were all I were shooting for, not the wording.
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Good wow, bad wow, or just interesting?
I realize when I look back at this one, that, poetically, it's not that great, this, like most of my poems, is something that just flew out of my pen.
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interesting ^^ and good i like it
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Thanks, yeah, I think it's interesting, but not so much on the good side...
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aww why do u say that? harsh critic
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*shrug* Because, just looking at the rhyming sequences, the repeated words bouncing off of each other. As a work of poetry, it sucks, as a piece of emotion put to words, it's great.
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aww well dont strain to hard to put those things in or they wont work
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