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Published: 2002-10-26 13:40:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 241; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 13
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Is there a God?Is there such a beauty
Such a sight
Such love possible
For everyone but me
Is that called ‘right’?
Where is God now?
In need of salvation
In need of relief
In need of some love
All that loves me is me
Or so I believe
Where was God then?
Blown away by one bit of info
Crushed and naturally in pain
Death has done its job again
She was part of me
Lost, and there’s nobody to blame
Hear me God
If you exist
I feel no vengeance
It’s just that my mother
Will be missed…
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Comments: 6
as a reader: i love the poem. its wonderful
as a critic: God is always there. duh.
as a poetryhelper: i think the underlines take away. i dunno. maybe it's just my prejudice against underlines. i think they should be in bold or something. i like the last stanza in italics. it's that oomph that all poems need but rarely have, the sudden switch from anger to sadness, it's there and it was put there well. this is one of the rare instances where the rhyming doesnt take away. you almost miss the rhyme at first, it's a different scheme. i commend that, too.
well done overall
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This is gorgeous. Questioning god kind of sucks, cuz you're confused and don't know where your head is at, I'm in the middle of it as we speak. I hope that things go ok, or at least better for you.
~Emm
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stylistically, i initially didn't like the underlined breaks in this poetry, which obviously emphasizes the important questions that make-up this poem. after a while though, i've let go of such discomfort, for such lines, after all, highlight the heart of your poetry - questioning God's existence.
i love it that you devote three stanzas to skepticism, but a doub about God's existence that does not reveal anger but more like a desperate need for understanding. and in the last stanza, in italicized form, you express a sense of hope and entertain the possibility of God's existence.
this is truly an amazing poem - profound, sincere, and very personal.
(and by the way, with the recent and tragic loss of a loved-one in my life, i can perfectly relate to your sentiments)
thanks for sharing this poem.
peace.
+g
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This is absolutely beautiful. I love the questioning of God where he was then and where he was now when this happened to you. It portrays so many emotions that it just mesmerizes the reader. Beautiful use of wording and rhyme scheme. Again, very beautifully poem and I am sorry for your loss.
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