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Published: 2009-12-22 16:12:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 173; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 5
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Description His fingers move across the keys stiffly.
C-to the G,
To the B-to the C again.
What makes him so tired and weak?
He makes a wimper everytime he hits a note perfectly.
I can't help him,
I feel useless.
I scream his name a thousand times,
But he can't hear me or see me.
I sit next to him,
Hearing the beautiful music that is played.
He looks through me,
Though it seems he is looking at me.
His fingers stop.
My heart stops.
I can hear our breathing fall into a steady unison.
His fingers start again.
I can't stand it!
"Stop! Stop the music! It's killing me!"
I scream, but he can't hear me.
I feel a trickle of liquid run down my ear and onto my neck.
I lift my hand and find that it's...blood.
Red, heartache, breathless blood.
The trail falls onto the keys and the boy stops.
He looks at the splotch and cries.
He whispers, "What have I done to deserve this? Let her go!"
My breathing has become rapid as I try to calm down.
I fall into the abyss as he finally realizes I'm here,
With him.
"Baby", he whispers, "I'm so sorry."
"Your too late."
He holds me as I close my eyes for the last time,
The picture of his face in agony still stuck in my mind...
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Comments: 24

kutturkuttur [2009-12-30 02:43:12 +0000 UTC]

speechless... which is amazing for me.

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2009-12-30 06:02:50 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much!

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2009-12-30 16:59:44 +0000 UTC]

it's amazing. no prob.

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2009-12-30 20:27:14 +0000 UTC]

i didn't really write it down. it just sorta popped up in my head...

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2009-12-31 00:18:38 +0000 UTC]

haha, well, spontaneity is power.

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2009-12-31 05:20:42 +0000 UTC]

yeah and a very powerful power.

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2009-12-31 05:22:08 +0000 UTC]

yes. MUAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2010-01-01 01:50:05 +0000 UTC]

MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA...HA HA...HA

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2010-01-01 05:06:23 +0000 UTC]

you forgot a 'ha"

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2010-01-01 20:48:08 +0000 UTC]

oh............HA
lol.

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2010-01-02 19:28:20 +0000 UTC]

Ok, it's good now

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2010-01-03 01:52:06 +0000 UTC]

yeah! its just all wrong if you miss a HA in your
MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA....ok im done...

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2010-01-06 01:42:59 +0000 UTC]

Yep, just that one mistake screws the entire thing up

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2010-01-06 22:47:04 +0000 UTC]

yeah, you're right...

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2010-01-09 19:28:34 +0000 UTC]

Yeppers.

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2010-01-10 03:40:35 +0000 UTC]

what were you right on?

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2010-01-10 22:29:53 +0000 UTC]

you missed a "HA" in your, \"MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA"

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to kutturkuttur [2010-01-11 02:57:55 +0000 UTC]

ooooooooh riiight! i got it now.

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kutturkuttur In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2010-01-14 16:22:53 +0000 UTC]

lol. indeed.

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breath-of-life25 [2009-12-24 03:35:13 +0000 UTC]

very lovely
meaning all through it..

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to breath-of-life25 [2009-12-24 17:07:49 +0000 UTC]

why thank you very much...i got the idea from my dream...which is very long so if you remember tell me when we get back to school.

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breath-of-life25 In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2009-12-26 03:05:14 +0000 UTC]

...hmm.. not really..
when we go back could you tell me again?
might remember when u start to tell me again...
im good at remembering dreams except when their my own. >.<

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UnderControl4Ever In reply to breath-of-life25 [2009-12-26 17:09:05 +0000 UTC]

...hmmm...okay!

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breath-of-life25 In reply to UnderControl4Ever [2009-12-27 23:57:20 +0000 UTC]

yay!!

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