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He marvelsthat a woman
can love a man
older than she, herself.
As if we all stack chips to a height
we expect all others to reach
but not to exceed.
But I have seen
one such miracle too many;
I have been the victim
of an unlikely affair
like theirs; where power
and money
and age
and forgetfulness
rocked decency to a shamed sleep
at the expense of those too innocent to watch.
And yet,
in the longest silence,
the grand old image resurfaces:
a man with shaking hands,
a woman like a stained glass window...
He is twenty eight
and I am only nineteen,
but when that powerful mouth curves
around the syllables of my name,
I know that I know that I'll know
that he is the kind --
that no man beneath me
deserves to be beneath me.
But still, that man --
he marvels at the distance between twenty
and "much much older"
like these things never happen.
I told this dreamer, this distracted idealist
the most important parts of my story.
He is (how old?)
and I am only nineteen:
I cannot help but wonder why he asks.
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spartan-locke [2012-12-13 05:17:49 +0000 UTC]
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There's a lot about this that I'm still working through, but from what I can tell, the basic narrative boils down to the narrator being in love with an older man, and him struggling to understand it, and she struggling with something in her past as well as her own desire not to let his gratefulness for her love let her seem him as less than. (and yes that sentence is a perfect example of a run-on) He's pretty simple, he (likely) loves her, she has reciprocated those feelings, and he's struggling to understand his love within his world view. She sees this, and this is the area I'm grappling with, when she says "I've seen one such miracle too many" I assume that's a reference to how he views her love for him.
Then after that she recalls a parallel romance that ended or was bad. And after considering that falls to an image of possible hope for them. The poem then closes out with her trying to learn to respect him in spite of his awe of her, and an ending that seems to reaffirm their affection for one another.
I dunno if that was rambling or not, but either way Great work.
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glossolalias [2012-12-08 11:15:42 +0000 UTC]
your work has been featured here: [link] please go check out the other pieces & have a nice day
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