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Published: 2007-05-23 22:32:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 266; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 2
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Description He held me in his arms as I held my sorrows in
He spoke kind words to me to free me from my sin.
I refused to show my pain, I couldn’t hide it anymore
He told me he was there for me and from my heart it tore.

My eyes started to water as he spoke these words to me
He wiped a tear away, as he let my soul break free.
A few more tears rolled down my cheek, I knew I had to fight
He told me it was ok to cry as he held onto me tight.

I tried to break away from him as my tears began to flow
But he only held on tighter and said he would never let me go.
He held me through the night as I cried out all my rage
I would cherish that night forever, the night he turned the page.
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Comments: 21

Spectrolite [2007-06-14 00:12:49 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful writing. Now, let's see what I can do... *rolls up sleeves and tries to get creative juices flowing*

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to Spectrolite [2007-06-14 04:17:21 +0000 UTC]

*taps fingers together*excelent**

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amazonite [2007-06-01 03:47:51 +0000 UTC]

Way to go! Congrats for getting over the block - and keep on writing, kiddo.

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Rain-Feather [2007-05-27 03:33:25 +0000 UTC]

yay! it's the coool poem from lunch!! *Happy dance*

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maxitaxi10 [2007-05-25 02:53:31 +0000 UTC]

THAT POEM IS REALLY GOOD!!! I LOVE IT, I OWN IT!!

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to maxitaxi10 [2007-05-25 02:54:43 +0000 UTC]

thankies!

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iMike2 [2007-05-24 21:37:39 +0000 UTC]

That is such an amazing piece of work. My jaw is on the floor.

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to iMike2 [2007-05-24 22:39:02 +0000 UTC]

yay! I'm thinking about entering it into a contest.

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Amanda-San [2007-05-24 13:03:25 +0000 UTC]

Very nice, I remember reading this in class. I like how you rhyme without forcing it, so it sounds natural as opposed to the streamline rhyming that you can tell doesn't add anything to the piece. Great job!

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to Amanda-San [2007-05-24 21:13:59 +0000 UTC]

thankies!

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NeonLites [2007-05-24 03:17:13 +0000 UTC]

Even though I already told you this in choir, I'm saying it again-- this is soooo sweet!

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to NeonLites [2007-05-24 03:20:35 +0000 UTC]

thank you! it makes me happy inside.

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Lijra [2007-05-23 22:36:28 +0000 UTC]

Omg, *first comment dance*
I love this...It's...deep!
Good job!!
Gotta Fav it!

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to Lijra [2007-05-23 22:38:59 +0000 UTC]

thankies!

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MidStaryNight [2007-05-23 22:35:35 +0000 UTC]

Wow, I like it a lot! That would make an interesting picture.

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to MidStaryNight [2007-05-23 22:43:33 +0000 UTC]

i thought so too. my friend spectrolite does alot of amazing work and has done a few pieces like that. so i be like...hey..*nudge*

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MidStaryNight In reply to Your1nOnlyStringBean [2007-05-23 22:49:37 +0000 UTC]

Well, if Spectrolite decides to draw it, can you send it my way? I'd love to see it.

Also, I love your user name. Awesome.

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to MidStaryNight [2007-05-24 00:35:43 +0000 UTC]

i'll be sure to post it. and thanks!

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Skellington13Rose [2007-05-23 22:34:19 +0000 UTC]

This is really good.

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Your1nOnlyStringBean In reply to Skellington13Rose [2007-05-23 22:37:16 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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Skellington13Rose In reply to Your1nOnlyStringBean [2007-05-23 22:38:38 +0000 UTC]

Anytime ^^

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